Memory Keepers

Invisible but always near, Sylvia has watched Violet her entire life.  She is Violet’s memory keeper.

Turning to her apprentice, Sylvia says, “It’s almost time.”  His finger hovers over the button.

Violet takes her last breaths as Sylvia commands, “Now!”

The apprentice pushes the button.  Violet’s best memories smoothly transfer back to her.  She is filled with joy as death greets her.

It is finished.

Smiling, Sylvia turns to the apprentice and says,

“It’s time to promote you to a memory keeper of your own.”

The apprentice asks, “Are you sure I’m ready?”

Sylvia responds, “Just keep the wheels turning.”

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“Friday Fictioneers” is a weekly challenge by Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  The challenge is to write a story, using only 100 words, in response to a photo prompt.  This week’s photo was provided by Ted Strutz.  Other stories can be found here.

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34 Comments Add yours

  1. Interesting and imaginative take on the prompt

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    1. Thanks so much! I was at a loss and thought I might need to skip this week. =) But, then this story came to me. I love when that happens!

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      1. Yes sometimes the ones we think aren’t our best get better reactions than the others we are more proud of

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Memory keeper is a lovely idea

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    1. Thanks so much, Neil! I love the idea that our life flashes before us, memories of those we loved and times of joy, in our final moments. =)

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  3. draliman says:

    That sounds quite a responsibility to have!

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    1. For sure, a great (and wonderful) responsibility! Thanks for commenting. =)

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  4. Jelli says:

    Wow, that was a very interesting take on the prompt. Great story,

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    1. Thanks so much for your encouraging comment! =)

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  5. Create Space says:

    So unusual and an interesting take on death and memories. I love it Brenda!

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  6. There is so much more to this flash fiction piece than appears obvious on the first read. Memory keeping sounds mysterious, magical and scientific all at once. Alluring prose, Brenda 😇

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    1. Thank you so much, Kelvin, for this encouragement! I’m new to writing fiction and am learning so much from reading yours and other’s posts on FF. Happy New Year!

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  7. granonine says:

    What a novel idea 🙂

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  8. Moon says:

    A really intriguing concept and such a great take on the prompt . Very nicely done, Brenda. 🙂

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    1. Thank you, Moon, for your encouragement. I almost let the prompt go because a story wouldn’t come. And then…this arrived. =)

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  9. Dear Brenda,

    It’s interesting to me that Violet seems to be outliving her memory keeper. It’s a lovely idea, particularly with the prevalence o Alzheimer’s and dementia. I like this piece.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you so much for your encouragement. I’ve just started writing and appreciate any feedback or comments. The story is of Violet’s last moments. Sylvia, the memory keeper, has the apprentice transfer Violet’s memories back to her in her last moments of life. I wrote, “Violet takes her last breaths.” But I wonder if it needs to be made clearer, such as, “They dance before her eyes and fill her with joy as death greets her.”?? I would love your feedback!

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      1. Oh dear, in this case the reader missed the part about it being Violet’s last breaths. But I was a little unclear even at that as to who’s transferring the memories to whom. I like the idea of your story. 100 words can be challenging. I think you’re off to a great start with it, though. This might be a story you’ll want to play with and expand. I like your proposed sentence but you’ll have to cut something to make it fit It’s all a dance isn’t it? Two steps this way and one step that way.

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      2. Thanks so much Rochelle! Whew, 100 words is a challenge but I am enjoying myself immensely with this challenge. I appreciate your comments and advice! I tweaked the story and hope it makes more sense. I was thinking that 100 words is truly a challenge when trying to introduce three characters; Violet, her memory keeper (Sylvia), and the apprentice. Maybe that’s too much. Anyway, here in Hong Kong there’s only 45 minutes until 2018. Joyous new year!! Take care!

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  10. What an absolutely lovely concept. Just finished a fantasy series in which the dragons are keepers of memories of dragons of the past, so could relate to this one even more.

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    1. Oh, I like that! Thank you for your encouraging words. =)

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  11. I love the thought of that memory being transferred… to be able to build from generation to generation into more and more knowledge. We try to do that the hard way (which is what my library is all about)

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    1. I too love the idea of your library, storing all the knowledge of the universe. My biggest fear is forgetting. I relish the thought that there exists a memory keeper; keeping all of my memories so that nothing is lost. Blessed 2018!

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  12. A very novel take on the prompt. I wonder if my memories are being stored elsewhere, seeing they’ve seemed to evaporated through large holes in my grey matter over the past few years. 🙂
    I’ve heard that some people see things clearly in their last moments — even some things they refused to see (or admit) during their lives. (Like whose fault it really was. 😉 )

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    1. I can certainly relate. My biggest fear is forgetting as a grow older. I hope there is truly a memory keeper, especially for our best ones! I too have heard that people experience a remembrance as they pass. Blessed 2018!

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  13. Sandra says:

    Interesting take on the prompt and very nicely done.

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    1. Thanks so much Sandra! Blessed 2018 to you!

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  14. Iain Kelly says:

    This is a lovely response to the prompt, and innovative too. Weel done.

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    1. Thanks so much Iain! =)

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      1. Iain Kelly says:

        You’re welcome

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  15. mydaisydaze says:

    Awesome! I feel there is a longer story here, the journey of the new memory keeper….hmmm…thanks Brenda.

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    1. Thanks so much. For sure, the new memory keeper fumbles a bit at first. Initially, he inadvertently loses a few memories that his charge will never recover. I think I must have a trainee memory keeper. That would explain why I forget so much! (haha)

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