Lace Maker

Dressed in a stunning blue gown covered in lace, she dances.  Her partner holds her close in his arms.  They float across the marble floor to the uplifting music of the orchestra.

A sudden pain explodes across the back of her neck. Looking up, the face of her owner is a strange color purple.  Bending close, he hisses, “Get back to work!”

She looks down at her stained frock.  Reluctantly, she works her needle through the delicate white material.  Her eyes narrow as she turns to watch him walk away.

He has taken everything else.  He can’t take my dreams.

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“Friday Fictioneers” is a weekly challenge by Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  The challenge is to write a story, using only 100 words, in response to a photo prompt.  This week’s photo was provided by Roger Bultot.  Other stories can be found here.

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38 Comments Add yours

  1. A fluent, forceful and dreamy tale of slavery and bullying. Nice one, Brenda.

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    1. Thank you so much for your encouragment, Kelvin!

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    Beautifully and brutally done Brenda, excellent work.

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    1. Thanks so much for the encouragment, Iain!

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      1. Iain Kelly says:

        You’re very welcome.

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  3. Dear Brenda,

    It took me a minute to realize what was going on. After the second read it became brutally apparent She sounds like a determined woman. I hope she can break free from her cruel owner. Well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle! She dreams of freedom and has a determined spirit. I met girls like her while working in India. Some do make it out, not all and of course not nearly enough, but some.

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  4. michael1148humphris says:

    A fine story, You left me rooting for her.

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    1. I’m so glad! Thank you for commenting, Michael.

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  5. Well written powerful piece. For the strong minded not everything can be owned.

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    1. Very true indeed! Thank you for your encouragement, Irene.

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  6. What a superbly powerful tale. Take a bow Brenda!

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    1. You are very sweet, thank you!!

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  7. draliman says:

    Brutal, but she hasn’t given up. I can think of somewhere else she should stick her needle, then make good her escape.

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    1. I love your suggestion! =) This is a brutal reality for many, it is heartbreaking. But she is determined to keep her dignity and her dreams! Thank you for commenting.

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  8. Sandra says:

    Very nicely done. A lot said in a few words.

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    1. Thank you so much, Sandra, for your encouragment! =)

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  9. Owner… what a cruel word… sometimes the border between employer and owner is thin… I did think sweat shop, and wonder how it feels to get married in a dress built from tear.

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    1. For sure, all good points. Sweatshops are a sad reality (to say the least) in our world. So many of the products we buy are manufactured by laborors living and working in sub-standard conditions. It is a deep and complicated issue. Thanks!

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  10. Moon says:

    So very well written ,Brenda.
    I feel helplessly sad for those girls/ women.

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    1. Thanks so much, Moon for your encouragement. Sad indeed!

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  11. Dale says:

    That was a serious punch in the gut. So well done, Brenda.

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    1. Thank you for your encouragment, Dale. Her life is a sad reality for many, unfortunately.

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  12. granonine says:

    I was so startled by the sudden pain on her neck that I had to go back and start again! Really good writing.

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    1. She has her dreams, her owner cannot take that away from her no matter how he abuses her. When writing this post, a specific little girl came to my mind that I knew in India. I can see her face in defiance and determination. Thank you so much for your encouragement!

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  13. rachelmalik99 says:

    Really grim and really ‘like’ the way that the story is framed within such beautiful and delicate images.

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    1. The life of a child laborer is indeed grim. Thank you for your encouragement on my writing. I am new to this and am enjoying this medium of communicating and creating.

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  14. Dan Bohn says:

    Brenda, you have a tender heart. Great realistic story.

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    1. Thank you so much, Dan, for your encouragement and kind words! =)

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  15. ceayr says:

    As beautifully crafted as the lace, this is painfully excellent.

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    1. Thanks so much for your encouraging words! =)

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  16. Great ending twist, Brenda. Everyone needs to dream sometimes. She has little else. Good writing. —- Suzanne

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    1. Thank you so much, Suzanne! =)

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  17. Vidhya Shree says:

    Powerful one Brenda..

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    1. Thank you so much for your encouragement! =)

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  18. pennygadd51 says:

    You lulled me into a false sense of security with your opening words, making the blow across her neck doubly brutal.
    While this powerful story obviously applies to sweatshop labour in the clothing industry (and well done for highlighting the issue), it could also be an allegory for life as most people experience it. We all receive unexpected blows of fate, and we all need our dreams – and we all have the possibility of escape and freedom.

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    1. That is very true, I hadn’t thought of it in those terms. Thank you for pointing that out. Life has it’s beautiful moments, and then there are at times some shockingly difficult moments mixed in. I hope not too many though, Penny. Take care and thanks for commenting!

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