Surviving

Sam walks through the day weighed down, as if being pulled to the grave with her.

She was the love of his life.  Four children later came the diagnosis.

Sitting at the table, he reflects.

His little boy comes up behind him,

“Can I have a drink of water, daddy?”

Sam answers in a whisper, not trusting his voice to crack,

“Sure, I’ll be there shortly.”

Looking up, Sam notices a large spider in the window.  She loved spiders.

“How will I survive without you?”

The answer comes as if the spider speaks,

One cup of water at a time.

~~

“Friday Fictioneers” is a weekly challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  The challenge is to write a story, using only 100 words, in response to a photo prompt.  This week’s photo was provided by Victor and Sarah Potter.  Other stories can be found here.

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28 Comments Add yours

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    Beautifully done – a wise spider indeed.

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  2. draliman says:

    Very nice. A tragic situation, but he’s discovered a way through.

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    1. Thanks for commenting!! =)

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  3. Oh, that was so poignant and so well expressed.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thank you so much for your encouragement! Have a nice weekend! =)

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  4. JT Twissel says:

    Ah, the lessons of a spider. You’ve got a great opening – particularly that first line.

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    1. Thank you so much for that! I have to say I am not a big spider fan personally. =)

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  5. mydaisydaze says:

    WOW, Brenda you gave me the shivers…it’s such a true statement, that’s how we all survive. Thank you.

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  6. pennygadd51 says:

    Beautifully constructed, carrying us irresistibly to the poignant – but heartening – conclusion. Very well done!

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  7. Oh Brenda,

    This is a heart twister. And that last line. Spot on perfect. Beautifully done.

    Shalom

    Rochelle

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    1. I’m happy you enjoyed it, thanks for the encouragement! =)

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  8. How poignant and touching. Lovely take.

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  9. In my opinion, this is a beautiful and accomplished piece of flash. The first line is very visual, a good image. There’s good compression too. I love flash fiction. I’ve been working on a submissions for Palm-sized Press and Mslexia. You should enter too.

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    1. Thank you so much for your encouragement, Constance! It means a lot. I haven’t heard of Palm-sized Press and Mslexia (this is all new for me) but I will certainly look into it. Thanks again! =)

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  10. Liz Young says:

    Lovely writing – that’s one spider that will be left in peace.

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    1. For sure! Thanks so much. =)

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  11. Dan Bohn says:

    This is a very sweet story. Thanks Brenda.

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  12. Dale says:

    Brenda, this is so absolutely beautiful. As a widow, I know of what he speaks… You portrayed that feeling of “I can’t possibly go on without you. But then I do” perfectly.

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    1. I’m so sorry for the loss and grief you have experienced in your life. Sending a hug through the blogsphere! Thank you for commenting.

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      1. Dale says:

        Thank you. That is sweet. 😘

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  13. granonine says:

    The heartbreak here is palpable. Excellent.

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    1. Thank you for reading and commenting!

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  14. Lovely. It seems he’s going to take one day at a time as the children depend on him. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    1. Thanks so much Suzanne! Yes, one day at a time…

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