Atonement

Pulling aside the curtain, Mabel gazed into the backyard.  She imagined ghosts of the past filling the chairs around her outdoor table.  Their floating laughter lost in the breeze.  Plans were set into motion at that table.  But there was a cost.  Because of what they did, atonement was required.  Every year they gathered to draw sticks, taken from the tree that stood watch.  The wilderness chose the one who would walk away from the table, never to return.

The stakes were high with only two of them left.  Mabel dropped the curtain when the doorbell rang.  It was time.

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“Friday Fictioneers” is a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  The challenge is to write a story, using only 100 words, in response to a photo prompt.  It has been a lot of fun to join in with this fantastic and encouraging group of writers!  This week’s photo prompt was provided by Fatima Fakier Deria.  If you would like to read other Friday Fictioneers’ stories, visit HERE.

 

For those of you who celebrate Easter, I wish you a very blessed one; filled with lots of love and laughter with family and friends! 

happy_easter

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33 Comments Add yours

  1. draliman says:

    Ooh, I wonder what they did? Must have been pretty bad. I bet the “tree that stood watch” knows, but it ain’t telling…

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    1. Hehe, there lies the mystery. The tree indeed knows and chooses the “one” to walk away. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Have a nice weekend! =)

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  2. plaridel says:

    i’d run the hell out there while i still can.

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    1. That would be my inclination as well. But, you would be found. =) Thank you for commenting!

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  3. Dale says:

    Perfect timing with Easter and all…
    Wonder what they must atone for – the sins of their own making…

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    1. Thank you, Dale. I love that you are left wondering. =)

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    Wonderful sense of mystery here. Happy Easter Brenda 🙂

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    1. Thank you, Iain! Hope you have a wonderful weekend. =)

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  5. Lovely mysterious tale there.

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  6. Dear Brenda,

    Ominous and mysterious. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you, Rochelle! =)

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    1. Thank you! I love “intriguing.” =)

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  7. granonine says:

    And what burden of guilt would the remaining one bear? Great story!

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    1. A heavy burden indeed. Thank you for commenting and encouraging! Happy Easter! =)

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  8. Creepy. The tree that is all knowing and decides each ones fate and now only one left. I think I’d have not come to the table and made my own decision. Good story.

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    1. Thanks so much, Irene, for commenting. Some tried to walk away, but “things” happened that brought them back to the table. (Trying to sound creepy … hehe). =)

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  9. jillyfunnell says:

    Sense of mystery here which leaves the reader to decide what they’ve done. Nicely written story.

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    1. Thank you so much for your comment! That was my goal, to leave the reader to wonder. =)

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  10. Moon says:

    Wonderful and wonderfully written story, Brenda. Loved the mystery here.

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    1. Thanks so much, Moon. I’m so glad you enjoyed it! =)

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  11. Liz Young says:

    Gosh! I wonder what they all did. Happy Easter to you too.

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    1. Hope you had a nice weekend! There will only be one left who must carry the burden…

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  12. This brought back the memory of a book called Doctor Fischer of Geneva or the Bomb Party by Graham Greene… sounds like a lottery made in hell.

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    1. Wow, that certainly is a compliment. Thanks so much! =)

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  13. Jan Vanek says:

    Wow–I want to read the next 100 words! I want to know the past and the future of this story. Well done!

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    1. Thank you so much, Jan. I’m so glad it left you wondering! =)

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  14. pennygadd51 says:

    A good story that piqued my curiosity. I’d love to know what plans were made that could involve them in such a lethal lottery.

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    1. I’m so glad the story piqued your curiosity. I love when that happens. Thanks! =)

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  15. athling2001 says:

    I wouldn’t want to be her. Wondering why there needs to be atonement.

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    1. It’s a mystery. I wouldn’t want to be her as well. =)

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