Bright Lights

Her mama cried, her daddy begged her to stay.  But she was talented.  That’s what the man said, “I can make you famous.”  He met her at the bus station.  Excited, she asked, “When do we get to work?”  He said, “I want to show you the bright lights of the city first.”  She squealed in delight.  The sights were exotic, the food delicious.  Strolling the streets with his arm around her shoulders, she stumbled.  Fighting to keep her eyes open, the lights began to blur.  Before falling into darkness, she heard the man say, “Now, it’s time to work.”

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“Friday Fictioneers” is a weekly challenge by Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  The challenge is to write a story using only 100 words in response to a photo prompt.  The photo was taken by Jill Wisoff.  It has been a lot of fun to join in with this fantastic and encouraging group of writers!  Other stories can be found HERE.

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37 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Chilling and nicely understated

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    1. Thank you, Neil. That’s what I was going for. The photo prompt coincided with a news article I recently read. Sad truths.

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    1. That is very true, Keith, far too many. And in places it should never happen. Very sad.

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  2. Jaya K says:

    Sad but a reality in some places.

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    1. Yes it is a sad reality in many places. Thank you for stopping by and reading my story.

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Dark story, well written.

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    1. Thank you, Iain, for the encouragment.

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  4. Dear Brenda,

    Jaw-dropping reality setting in. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you, Rochelle. The photo prompt coincided with a news article I recently read as well as an email I received from my niece. She is passionate about anti-trafficking issues. A sad reality for too many.

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  5. LucciaGray says:

    A scary tale, well told. Chilling.

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    1. Thank you, Luccia. A scary tale indeed.

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  6. Nooooooo, I loved/hated this piece. I knew what was coming but still felt betrayed by the predator.
    Tracey

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    1. Thank you, Tracey, for reading and commenting. I’m glad you loved/hated this as the story relays the truth for far too many.

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  7. pennygadd51 says:

    Wow, that’s dark and altogether too credible. And it happens in cities up and down the land, over and over again. Well written!

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    1. Thank you, Penny. Unfortunately, you are right. It’s sad.

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  8. A very well depicted, chilling scenario. Poor girl!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thank you, Susan, for reading and commenting. =) Unfortunately, this is a true scenario for girls worldwide.

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  9. JT Twissel says:

    Scary. Yes the bright lights of a city can be both intoxicating and frightening.

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    1. Unfortunately so and indeed scary. Thank you for commenting. =)

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  10. Dale says:

    This is SO how I feared it would go… and actually, went in a direction I originally wanted to for another story!
    Very well done.

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    1. Thank you, Dale. We had the same thought, what is it ‘they’ say about great minds. =)

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      1. Dale says:

        Absolutely! 😁

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  11. granonine says:

    This makes me want to cry. So common. I will never, ever understand why a young girl would trust her future to someone she doesn’t know.

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    1. I’m sorry to make you want to cry, but certainly understand the sentiment. The naive out there come into contact with the predator. So sad!

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  12. lisarey1990 says:

    Chilling. Really well done.

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    1. Thank you so much, Lisa!

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  13. draliman says:

    I had a feeling that was going to go bad. I wonder how many have fallen into this trap?

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    1. Unfortunately, there are many who have. The draw of becoming famous with a plethora of predators out there.

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  14. jillyfunnell says:

    Another victim of her own dreams. Very sad story and it’ll be happening to somebody right now.

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    1. Sadly, that is very true. Thank you for stopping by, Jilly! =)

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  15. Alas… I think this happens way too often… maybe my story is the sequel to yours.

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    1. Bjorn, your story is very well-written and definitely a sequel to where I was going with mine! Unfortunately, it is a sobering fact that this happens way to often.

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  16. Lynn Love says:

    Horrifying and yet so many naive young people fall for charming criminals like this. Well written Brenda

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    1. Thank you, Lynn. A tragedy for sure!

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  17. So horribly close to reality for some. Well done

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    1. Unfortunately so. Thank you for commenting, Michael. =)

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