Safe Place

Her mama told Nara to stay below deck.  She peeked through a tiny window at the people on shore. Their singsong voices drifted as they greeted one another, as vendors hawked their wares in the colorful market.  Will this be the place?  Returning to sit amongst her sisters, the gentle bobbing of the boat and the light breeze lulled her to sleep.  Her dreams soon turned to nightmares though, of violence and hunger.

A mechanical whirr woke her.  Nara jumped to the window.  The boat headed out to sea as the moon rose over another place they were not wanted.

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“Friday Fictioneers” is a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  The challenge is to write a story, using only 100 words, in response to a photo prompt.  This week’s photo was provided by Gah Learner.

It’s a lot of fun to join this fantastic and encouraging group of writers!  If you would like to read other stories, visit Here.

 

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28 Comments Add yours

  1. draliman says:

    Sad, forced from place to place, unwanted. I’m guessing this is in reference to the current migrant crisis?

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    1. Yes, though I know it is a complicated issue with no easy answer, I just feel sad sometimes for the innocent ones who suffer. Thanks for reading and commenting!

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  2. Dear Brenda,

    The story of so many immigrants. Heart wrenching and well told.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you, Rochelle, for your comment. It is indeed heartbreaking.

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  3. Dale says:

    Sad story of refugees having nowhere to go. Well done.

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    1. It’s complicated yet mind-numbingly sad. We’ve worked with refugees, especially my husband, and a few cases turned out well though not many. Thanks for reading and commenting, Dale.

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  4. A sad tale of today’s global situations, very sad. At lest the boat hasn’t capsized and she has a window to look out from

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    1. So sad for many in desperate situations. Thank you for reading my post and commenting.

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  5. lisarey1990 says:

    This is so sad & sadly is happening a lot.

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    1. Very true. Thank you for commenting, Lisa.

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  6. You did a nice job putting a face on this sad situation. Too often society makes immigrants sounds like a pack of rabid stray dogs bringing nothing but trouble. How quickly we forget that our ancestors were once immigrants too.

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    1. I’m sorry for not responding until now. We had a vacation-type weekend for my daughter’s birthday. She’s with us for some time so I’m cherishing all the time together. =)

      Thank you for your thoughtful comments about my story. It’s a sad situation for many, unfortunately. Though it is also complicated, we do tend to villainize all those who seek safe shelter and a better life. Truly, we forget our immigrant history.

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  7. Susan says:

    Brenda, your story is heartbreaking. I can feel Nara’s sadness over not feeling wanted. I hope this family soon finds a place they can call home. Well done!

    Susan

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    1. Thank you so much, Susan. I’m so glad you could feel Nara’s sadness over being rejected and set back out to sea.

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  8. Ah this is so relevant to what’s happening in the world right now. Sad but sometimes it’s necessary to write a story about it.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Very true, Susan, it was on my heart to do so. Thank you for commenting. =)

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  9. Akshata Ram says:

    Life of a migrant.. well portrayed

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    1. Thank you for commenting! =)

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  10. jillyfunnell says:

    Telling this story from the viewpoint of a child enhances the poignancy.

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    1. The innocent ones. Thank you for commenting, Jilly.

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  11. Create Space says:

    Brenda you’ve sympathetically and vividly captured something sadly experienced by so many!

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    1. Thank you, Marie, for reading and for your thoughtful comment. =)

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  12. Sandra says:

    Topical and poignant.

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  13. So heartbreaking. Nicely done.

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    1. Thank you for commenting!

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  14. gahlearner says:

    Well told, heartbreaking and true, and this shames all of us.

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    1. Thank you so much for your comment!

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