Good Deed

Joseph pounded the wheel, glaring at the black screen on his phone.

The car cost a fortune, and it breaks down in the middle of nowhere!?

A man with matted hair limped towards the car from below the bridge.

He’s going to ask for money, he’s even carrying a cup!

The man knocked on Joseph’s window.

“Wanna cuppa coffee?  I can fix your car.”

What choice do I have?

Setting down the steaming mug, the man bent over the engine.

“Try it now.”

The car started.

Maybe he’ll take some cash?

Before Joseph could retrieve his wallet, the man disappeared.

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“Friday Fictioneers” is a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields, to write a story using only 100 words in response to a photo prompt.  This week’s photo was provided by our host, Rochelle.  If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from the week, visit HERE.

 

63 Comments Add yours

  1. Loved how you turned this on its head and showed the homeless man as someone prepared not only to do something for nothing but even offered a cup of coffee!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story, Susan. Thanks! =)

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  2. Jade M. Wong says:

    I loved how kindness and challenging stereotypes are at the forefront of this story. Many of us overlook the homeless, but forget that many of them have their own lives and skills and are deserving of respect. A great story for the prompt, Brenda.

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    1. I love your comment! I’m often challenged with my own preconceived ideas about people based on their outward appearance, and are proven wrong many times. Thanks, Jade, for reading and commenting. =)

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    A different guise for a good samaratin. Nicely done.

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    1. Thank you, Iain. I was going to title the story Good Samaritan, but changed it at the last minute. =) Enjoying reading your book!

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      1. Iain Kelly says:

        Let me know when you finish it and give me your thoughts, thank you so much for taking the time to read it 🙂

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    1. That’s for sure!! Thank you for reading and commenting, Tracey. =)

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  4. Evad Mac says:

    That was great, I liked how the dude didn’t stick around at the end.

    Thanks for sharing Brenda. I hope your doing well!

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    1. Hi Evad, long time. Thank you for reading my story and for commenting. I need to challenge my preconceived notions about people from time to time and this was a good reminder in writing the story. I’m doing very well, hope you are too. =)

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  5. neilmacdon says:

    Nice twist at the end

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  6. plaridel says:

    i try to be an optimist. your story has a credible ring to it. well done.

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    1. Me too, I’m a wanna be optimist, though I often miss the mark. Thank you for reading and commenting. =)

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  7. draliman says:

    The mysterious mechanic. Stories are told around camp fires… 🙂

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    1. He just disappeared and didn’t ask for anything …

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  8. Sandra says:

    Appearances can be so deceptive. What a lovely and illuminating experience for your main character.

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    1. I wrote a longer version of the story. It was more like 1500 words where the main character begins to see the value of life from another angle. It was difficult to cut it down to 100. Thank you for commenting! =)

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      1. Create Space says:

        Sounds interesting, share it in weekly installments!

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      2. I so appreciate your encouragement, Marie. I’m still a bit ‘shy’ about posting my stories, new writer and all. I’ll give it some thought! =)

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      3. Create Space says:

        Time sorts everything!

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  9. I love it when our biggoted presumptions go awry. Always a humbling experience. Great piece, Brenda.

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    1. Thank you so much, Russell. I’ve been humbled many a time. =)

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  10. A good Samaritan. It’s too easy to pre-judge people.

    Click to read my FriFic tale!

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    1. I agree, unfortunately, we are prone to judge first. At least it’s something I struggle with, not to do. Thanks for stopping by. =)

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  11. Liz Young says:

    Proof that one should never make assumptions.

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    1. Very true, Liz! Thank you for commenting. =)

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  12. 4963andypop says:

    Nice playing with our prejudicesand upturning them.

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    1. Thank you so much for your lovely comment. =)

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  13. Dale says:

    Love this. He assumed the man was homeless. What a nice random act of kindness.

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    1. I’m very pleased you enjoyed the story, Dale. =)

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  14. Dear Brenda,

    I think the man with the stalled car learned a lesson about human nature vs appearances. Well written piece that left me smiling.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Nice to make you smile. I need to learn this lesson from time to time as well. =)

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  15. Abhijit Ray says:

    When this happens, one is forced to believe in goodness of humans. It so touches heart in the middle of news about murder, rape, war and the list goes on.

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story. We certainly do need some good “news” these days. Thank you for commenting. =)

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  16. A good Samaritan not waiting for reward, a rare thing these days and totally unexpected by your characters

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    1. Thank you, Michael, for reading and commenting. A random act restores our faith in humanity.

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  17. A beautifully crafted story, building in the driver’s prejudices about the tramp man, in order to knock them down. Nicely done.

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    1. Thank you so much for your lovely comment! =)

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  18. Create Space says:

    Great reminder of how judgemental we are!

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    1. And how we (I) need to guard against being so. =)

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      1. Create Space says:

        I agree Brenda…we need to keep an eye on our habits. Xx

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  19. This is great. A reminder not to judge someone by their appearance.

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    1. Thank you so much, Jo!

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  20. Dahlia says:

    It is people like these who make the world go round – wonderful!

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    1. That’s for sure. Thanks for reading and commenting, Dahlia. =)

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  21. James McEwan says:

    Ah, he doesn’t wait for a reward, sometimes good deeds are a reward in themselves.

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    1. So true, they can give us a feeling of satisfaction especially when done without notice. Thank you for reading and commenting, James. =)

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  22. jillyfunnell says:

    We are so quick to judge, but how wrong can you be? Great take.

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    1. Thanks so much, Jilly. I know I am quick to judge too often. =)

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  23. granonine says:

    Not all people who live under bridges are trolls 🙂

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    1. Very true, liked your story about the troll! =)

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  24. Homeless people deserve our respect just as much as any one else, I’d say most people don’t wish to be in their situation. Great take on the photo.

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    1. They certainly do. There is a lot of brokenness in our world and we should seek to understand and respond with compassion. Not respond with preconceived ideas. Thanks so much for commenting!

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  25. Sometimes people are more than you expect… I have heard things like this, but somehow At least one person is cured from one of his prejudices

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    1. I love when that happens. Thank you so much, Bjorn, for reading and commenting.

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  26. A much better stranger, you could not encounter. Thank you.

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  27. Laurie Bell says:

    A true Good Samaritan! I wonder at his story

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    1. He certainly has a story as do we all. Thank you for commenting! =)

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  28. lisarey1990 says:

    I love it. Great message & so well put together.

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    1. Thank you so much, Lisa. Your comments are very encourageing. =)

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