Whispers

Jarrod, the conservator, stood before the blackened earth.

Facing the crowd, he explained, “The oil lamp slipped from Elizabeth’s hand. The family home burned down around her. No one knows exactly what happened that night.”

“Why did the villagers burn their homes?” asked a young man.

“I believe from solidarity,” Jarrod asserted.

A woman with cold eyes spoke in hushed tones, “I heard the graves opened that night. The dead walked among the villagers, whispering words of chaos and destruction.”

Jarrod snickered.

The woman whispered in his ear. Jarrod turned and walked into the lake.

He could not swim.

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Watching old ghost stories last week (Marchlands, The Secret of Crickley Hall) certainly influenced my story this week. It would seem this story is a far stretch from the attractive photo, provided by Nick Allen, but that’s what makes this challenge fun. Hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, we are encouraged to stretch our imaginations, let our muse guide us in creating a story using only 100 words based on a photo prompt.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, click HERE.

63 Comments Add yours

  1. Reena Saxena says:

    Exemplary solidarity!

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    A satisfying chiller, Brenda

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    1. I’m so glad you liked it. Thanks, Neil!

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  3. Ooooh Brenda,

    That sent shivers through me. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. I’m so glad. =) Thanks so much, Rochelle!

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  4. That was very eerie! Nicely done, Brenda.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thanks so much, Susan!

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  5. trentpmcd says:

    Spooky. Very well done.

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    1. Thank you, Trent, I’m glad you were spooked. =)

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  6. Iain Kelly says:

    Great chiller, that’ll teach him to snicker!

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    1. Evidently, powerful ghosts, like powerful people, don’t like to be laughed at (haha). Thanks, Iain!

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  7. granonine says:

    Well. That’ll teach him.

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    1. That’s right. 🙂 Thank you for commenting, Linda!

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  8. JT Twissel says:

    Trying to get away from the ghosts?

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    1. The woman (ghost) was proving her point. 🙂

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  9. Aaahh, that was so spooky, sent chills through me!! Great story!

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks so much for commenting. 🙂

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  10. michael1148humphris says:

    Such a unusual story, I have taken my hearing aid out just in case

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    1. It’s wise to turn it down … you never know. (haha) I like “unusual!”

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  11. One should always have care, when it comes to words… especially, if said words come out of a mouth one doesn’t know. Ouch.

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    1. Very true indeed! 🙂 Thank you for stopping by and commenting.

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  12. plaridel says:

    delightful in a creepy way. 🙂

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    1. I’m so glad you found it delightful! 🙂

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    1. Thanks so much, I like “eerie.” 🙂

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  13. Abhijit Ray says:

    Woman is from graves? What did she tell Jarrod that he walked into water? So many possibilities why house was burnt, most plausible being graves opening at night and dead whispering.

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    1. The whispers of the dead, that was the cause, and the woman proved her point with Jarrod. Thanks for commenting! 🙂

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  14. draliman says:

    He has snickered his last! Nice one 🙂

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    1. He sure has! Thanks so much. 🙂

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  15. A macabre tale indeed. Brilliant Brenda

    Click to read my FriFic tale!

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    1. Thank you so much, Keith. I’m happy your enjoyed it. 🙂

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  16. Sandra says:

    That should teach the others. What a sinister tale!

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    1. I don’t think anyone else in the group will laugh, that’s for sure. 🙂

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  17. lisarey1990 says:

    Brilliantly chilling.

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    1. Thank you so much, Lisa! 🙂

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  18. k rawson says:

    Methinks there are some powerful words spoken by living and dead alike!

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    1. That is certainly true. Words are indeed powerful in an of themselves. Thank you for commenting! 🙂

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  19. This week seems to be full of sinister posts.
    After effects of Halloween???

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    1. Very true, I’m not sure why the cool collection of oil cans produces sinisters stories, but oh well. Thank you for commenting! 🙂

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  20. 4963andypop says:

    Had to read it twice to get the true import of the cold-eyed woman’s whisper. It didnt help that this kept running through my head:

    “One dark night, when we were all in bed,
    Mrs O’Leary took the lantern to the shed…”. 😊

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    1. Oh my, that’s hilarious. Now, it’s in my head. 🙂

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  21. Violet Lentz says:

    that’s a chiller alright!

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    1. Thanks, Violet. Hope you enjoyed! 🙂

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  22. Dale says:

    Wickedly wonderful, Brenda!

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    1. Thanks so much, Dale! 🙂

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  23. James McEwan says:

    Yes, careful who you listen too, drives you nuts. A spooky idea that worked.

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    1. For sure! Thanks, James. 🙂

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  24. Creepy, in a very good way.

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    1. Thanks so much, Alicia, I’m glad you enjoyed!

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  25. jillyfunnell says:

    The solidarity of the villagers struck me very forcefully. An edgy and artfully unsettling story. Well done, Brenda.

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    1. Thank you so much, Jilly!

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  26. Tense stuff, Respect to the cold eyed woman!!

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    1. For sure! Thanks for commenting. =)

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  27. Now there is a spooky mystery. I might have to watch the shows you were watching and see where it leads. Great story.

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    1. Please do, they are very spooky yet entertaining. Thanks for your encouraging comments!

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  28. Ominous but so well laid out … loved it.
    Isadora 😎

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    1. Thanks for the nice comment, Isadora!

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  29. I think this is one of the most sinister ghost stories I’ve read.

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    1. I’m so glad. =) Thanks so much for letting me know!

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  30. Alice Audrey says:

    The whispers of a ghost are certainly more likely than that people would set themselves on fire for solidarity of and accident. Assuming her death was an accident.

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    1. The whispers are terrifying enough to be the cause. Thank you for commenting, Alice!

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  31. jwdwrites says:

    Excellent story Brenda, well done. 🙂

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    1. Thanks so much, that’s very encouraging. =)

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