Night-time Lanes

My mother’s drunken words cut me deep.

But, are they true?

The darkness of the center beckoned to me.  Picking the lock, I slid into the pool and sunk below the surface.  Within the water’s embrace, the voices of my demons dimmed. I sliced through the silkiness of the depths and the burn of countless laps dulled the pain.

The following night, the guard nodded as I slid through the door.  Over time, others joined.  Betty who lost her husband.  Joey who fights for sobriety.  Now, the night-time lanes are full.

No-one speaks.  That’s not what we are there for.

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This piece is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we are to write a 100-word story.  This week’s photo was contributed by our host, Rochelle. If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit HERE

 

 

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49 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    I absolutely loved that last line

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    1. I’m so glad, Neil. That makes me smile! =)

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  2. Fabulous piece of writing, Brenda! I believed every word of it.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. I’m so glad. =) Thank you for your very kind comment, Susan!

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  3. draliman says:

    I can believe how healing that would be, especially with the quiet.

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    1. I enjoy swimming and believe in its healing power. The quiet is a bonus, for sure. Thank you for reading and commenting, Ali. =)

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    If only there could be such a quiet time at our local pool – never not noisy and busy! I can believe it would be a relaxing place for heeling.

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    1. I love to swim and ocassionally can find a time when barely anyone else is in the pool. Those are my favorite times. Water therapy is very effective for many people.

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  5. Dale says:

    This was brilliant, Brenda. I think Rochelle can definitely relate! It is her happy place.
    And I agree with Neil. Love that last line.

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    1. Thank you so much, Dale. Your comments made me smile! =)

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  6. Tannille says:

    An unspoken understanding – powerful stuff. Like being connected but not (silence). I felt for the protagonist and glad she has her thing.

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    1. That unspoken connection is as powerful as the healing in swimming the lanes. Thank you so much for your kind comments!

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  7. After that last line, it almost feels wrong to say anything here! But I will because it’s a simply brilliant piece of writing.

    Rosey, a joke and some wine!.

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging comments!! =)

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  8. plaridel says:

    solitude can help rejuvenate one’s mind and body at the same time. great story.

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    1. It certainly can. Thank you so much for your kind comment! =)

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  9. msjadeli says:

    I love your story. It is soothing and healing to think of them there.

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    1. That’s so nice, thanks so much! =)

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You are very welcome.

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  10. Ann Coleman says:

    Peace and solitude are so healing….and this was a terrific story!

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    1. Thank you so much, Ann, for your encouragement. Personally, swimming has brought me so much peace and much needed physical relief. =)

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  11. I loved this story, Brenda. The guard was so understanding.in taking a chance. Maybe he had issues. It was good those people had somewhere to work off their problems. There are so many who need help. —- Suzanne

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story, Suzanne. I’m also glad you noticed the guard. I wrote a longer version and then cut it down but the guard was (is) a key character in the story. He is a retired police officer who is a widower and so very lonely at night especially. Anyway, thanks so much for your encouragement!

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      1. I often use excerpts from longer stories too. I noticed the guard too. He makes the story more real for me. Excellent piece, Brenda.

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      2. I’m so glad you saw the guard, Russell, and that he makes the story more real. I continue to put aside longer stories in hopes of one day growing them. Right now, they just sit quietly on my computer. =) Thanks so much for your encouragement!

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  12. Violet Lentz says:

    I love the direction this took.. Brilliant!

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    1. Thank you so much, Violet! =)

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  13. James McEwan says:

    I liked the idea of finding a moments peace and among others who were also healing.

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    1. They built a quiet community of support. Thank you so much for commenting, James!

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  14. granonine says:

    Really, really like this one. Swimming is indeed therapeutic, because as you do the laps, your mind sort of does a free-float after awhile. Tension dissolves, sleep comes easier. Excellent.

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    1. Ah, that makes me happy. I love my times in the pool and that’s where I got the idea for the story. Thanks so much, Linda!

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  15. Abhijit Ray says:

    Beautiful writing. So many layers in the story. Women getting numbing pain by swimming. Picking a lock under watchful eyes of a sympathetic watchman.

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    1. Yes, the guard is significant and in a longer version of the story he plays a key role. Thank you for noticing and for your encouraging comment, Abhijit! =)

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  16. subroto says:

    Sometimes a moment of quiet reflection is all we need. Even in the company of strangers. Wonderfully written story.

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    1. For sure, I know that’s the case for me at times. Thank you for the encouragement! =)

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  17. tedstrutz says:

    You said a lot. I liked this piece.

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    1. I’m very glad you like it. Thanks for reading and saying so. =)

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  18. magarisa says:

    A well-written tale of healing and connection.

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    1. Thank you so much, Magarisa!

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      1. magarisa says:

        You’re welcome, Brenda!

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  19. This sounds like a perfect way to heal… I know that some pools have candle.light swimming here… no noisy children allowed.

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    1. That sounds amazing, Bjorn. I’d love to be there for that!

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  20. Dear Brenda,

    That kind of therapy would work for me. 😀 Beautifully described. Love this story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Physical activity is key to emotional health, I know it is for me. And the solitude would be a bonus. Thank you so much, Rochelle, for your kind comments as always!

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  21. Sandra says:

    The calming, therapeutic effect of lap-after-lap is not to be underestimated.

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    1. For sure! Thank you for reading and commenting. =)

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  22. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh I Love this. There is so much emotion and solace found in silent companions. A beautiful image and feeling evoked

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    1. I’m very glad you enjoyed the story, Laurie. Thanks so much for your kind comments. =)

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