Second Chance

Melody shuffled aboard the train and slumped into her seat. Earlier that day, she received the bad news.

I gave up so much for this job!

She had moved away from family and put marriage on hold.  Closing her eyes, Melody slept.  She woke to the conductor calling.

“Corfe Station!”

A wave of déjà vu washed over her.  She tiptoed from the train and found her parents standing on the platform.

“Did you have fun at camp?” her mother asked.

Melody raised her hand to scratch her head.  She stared at her open palm, the palm of a twelve-year-old child.

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story.  The photo this week was taken Sandra Crook.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit HERE.

 

 

46 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Let’s hope it’s a dream not a vision. Of course, she won’t know for years

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    1. Very true. Thanks so much for commenting, Neil!

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  2. jillyfunnell says:

    What a fascinating concept – next day she could take another journey and alight the train in a different age group. I love it.

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    1. That’s a good idea, Jilly. Maybe she can choose where she wishes to start again from in her life journey. I’m happy your enjoyed the story! =)

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  3. Sandra says:

    A concept full of promise. Well done.

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    1. There have been times it would’ve been nice to have a do-over in life. Thanks so much, Sandra! =)

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  4. Create Space says:

    Unexpected twist Brenda!

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    1. Thanks so much, Marie, for commenting! I’m glad you enjoyed the story. =)

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  5. Dale says:

    Oooh… My mind is going wild now!

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    1. I like that!! Thank you for saying so. =)

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  6. Iain Kelly says:

    Tough choice – the chance to do it all over again and not make the same mistakes, or will she end up wishing she could get her old past back? Good story 🙂

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    1. Hmm…interesting. It is certainly a gamble. Thanks for your kind comment, Iain.

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  7. JT Twissel says:

    Interesting transition from the future to the past. To me she seems split between the old you’ve made your bed now lay in it or return home. Makes the readers want to read more – so bravo!

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    1. I really appreciate your encouraging comment. It’s always good to peek the curiosity of your reader. =) Thanks so much, Jan!

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  8. pennygadd51 says:

    Excellent take on the prompt. I wonder how much difference it would ultimately make? Thought provoking story, Brenda!

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    1. That’s an interesting point. Is she destined to make the same choices and mistakes? Maybe not, since she has foresight. Thanks so much for your encouraging comments, Penny!!

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  9. Interesting concept. I don’t know if I’d want to go back to age twelve, but 50 might not be so bad. 🙂

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    1. Yeah, now that you mention it. I don’t think I’d want to go that far either. Maybe she’ll have a choice. Get back on the train and travel up a few years. =)

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  10. Of course it’s Corfe! I was racking my brains, we climbed that hill and explored the castle 5 years ago I guess. Well done!!

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    1. Thanks so much! It’s nice that you’ve actually been there. =)

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  11. Dear Brenda,

    Oh my, you’ve piqued my interest and have me begging for more. Imaginative and clever.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. I’m so glad your interest is piqued, that’s high praise! Thanks so much, Rochelle, for your encouraging comments. =)

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  12. unexpected twist at the end. that said, i hope it’s not too late for her to start over.

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    1. She gets a re-do! Thanks so much for commenting. =)

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  13. Liz Young says:

    Not many people get the chance to relive their lives!

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    1. Sometimes I think I’d like to have the chance, but other times I’m not so sure. =) There are most certainly parts I’d never want to change.

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  14. draliman says:

    Just her luck – one of those darn “time trains” 🙂 Maybe if she gets off at the right stop, she’ll be her idea age!

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    1. draliman says:

      (“ideal”, that should be)

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    2. I’m thinking she’ll have a few tries​ to get the age that’s right for her to start again. =)

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  15. James McEwan says:

    I like how the character was as equally surprised as I was. Nicely done.

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    1. Thank you so much, James. I’m happy you enjoyed! =)

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  16. A great story well written, Brenda. What many of us wouldn’t do to live part of our youth over again. One of my favorite older movies was “Peggy Sue Got Married”. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    1. Oh, I really like that movie as well! Thanks for your encouraging comment, Suzanne! =)

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  17. Tannille says:

    Interesting concept.
    How weird it would be to be a kid again.

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    1. Very true, I’m not so sure I’d like to go that far back. =) Thanks so much for commenting!

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  18. ceayr says:

    Hmm, has she just been aboard the Tardis train or is she still asleep?
    Is it a one-off time-warp or just ordinary everyday magic?
    Or Groundhog Day?
    So many possibilities, which show what a clever and creative idea you had, Brenda.

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    1. High praise, CE, I’m smiling! I love the movie Groundhog Day by the way. Thanks again for the lovely comment. =)

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  19. Margaret says:

    That was some deja vu! How nice that she’s getting a second chance just when her life is taking a turn for the worse. Great idea. I love this story.

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    1. It certainly was, Margaret. Thank you so much for your encouraging comment. =)

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  20. Abhijit Ray says:

    The story is shifting between adult and child Melody. Obviously Melody loved her job at the camp site and she had lost that job. She did not want to go back home that came back in her dream. Was she dreaming?

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    1. No, she wasn’t dreaming. She lost the job she worked so hard to attain, boarded the train that normally took her home to her apartment each evening, but falling asleep, she was transported back in time. She now has a chance to do it all over again. Thanks for commenting, Abhijit! =)

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  21. She gets to live her life all over again! How awesome.

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    1. Yes, it could be good or bad. I guess it all depends on her new choices. Sometimes, I think it would be nice to have a do-over but there are so many things I would never want to change. A risk…

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  22. lisarey1990 says:

    I love the concept.

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    1. I’m very glad. Thank you so much for commenting, Lisa! =)

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