Storm

I swim the peaceful waters, while gale-force winds swirl around me. A brutal storm of chaos and mayhem. Corruption and abuse with cries for justice and freedom.

But, what can be done? Nothing.

For victory lies in the hands of the powerful. Like a cyclone, it gathers strength and waits patiently to descend and devour, leaving brokenness in its path.

Until the silence returns.

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story. The photo this week was taken by Jan Wayne Fields.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit HERE.

41 Comments Add yours

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    This metaphor could sum up so many situations around the world right now. Beautifully written.

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    1. Very true! The amount can be overwhelming. Thanks so much for commenting, Iain.

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  2. Dear Brenda,

    I find it comforting that the waters are peaceful while the winds blow. It says so much without a lot of explanation. Well described. Beautiful writing.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind comments, Rochelle!

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  3. Lovely in the writing, Brenda. It sounds like the violence and confusion we read in the papers these days. There’s so much trauma. —- Suzanne

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    1. Unfortunately, there is. It’s a very sad time. Thank you for your kind comment on the writing.

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  4. Beautiful, thought provoking piece, Brenda.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thank you so much, Susan!

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  5. plaridel says:

    i think of what’s happening in hong kong right at this minute. the storm will be over but at what price?

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    1. I shudder at the thought of what the price will be. I fear for friends of mine who are involved. It is a tumultuous time. Thank you for commenting.

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  6. neilmacdon says:

    Victory may, indeed belong to the powerful, but the trick is to make us believe we’re less powerful than we really are

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    1. That’s a very good point, Neil. Thank you for your comment.

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  7. draliman says:

    A metaphor so applicable to so much going on right now. Nice one!

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    1. Sadly so … Thanks much for commenting, Ali!

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  8. Dale says:

    Beautifully described, Brenda and like everyone has said, a brilliant metaphor for all that is going around.

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    1. Thanks so much, Dale, for your encouraging comment on the writing. Was feeling a “bit” morose during my morning swim. =)

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  9. James McEwan says:

    Reminds me of the forces that surround us, weather, nature and political – all leave me feeling helpless.

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    1. I certainly concur, James. Thanks so much for commenting!

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  10. Sandra says:

    Beautifully crafted, and sadly so topical.

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    1. Thank you, Sandra, for your encouraging comment on the writing. It is sad indeed!

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  11. A beautiful and skilfully written piece. Well done Brenda.

    My story – Gail’s Gazebo!

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    1. Thanks so much, Keith!

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  12. michael1148humphris says:

    Many will relate to swimming in quiet waters whilst storms rage all around them. A fine thought provoking piece.

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    1. It’s a common thing in today’s world, unfortunately. Thanks much for commenting, Michael!

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  13. msjadeli says:

    Brilliant at a macro level.

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    1. Thank you for the encouraging comment, Lisa!

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You are very welcome.

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  14. Liz Young says:

    Unfortunately your words are all too true!

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    1. Heavy sigh, it’s all so sadly true. Thanks for commenting, Liz!

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  15. Abhijit Ray says:

    One who can be at peace with her own self in the middle of chaos, has attained some sort of salvation.

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    1. That’s very true, Abhijit. Thank you for commenting.

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  16. Nobbinmaug says:

    This is a well-crafted metaphor for the world in which we live and the endless cycle of the grasp for power. We can’t stop the storm. Good job!

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind comment on the writing. A sad reality indeed.

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  17. Ann Coleman says:

    So powerful, and also quite timely!

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    1. Thanks, Ann, for your encouraging comment!

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  18. lisarey1990 says:

    Very powerful. Beautifully done.

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    1. Thanks so much, Lisa! =)

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  19. granonine says:

    Excellent metaphor.

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    1. Thank you so much, Linda. =)

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    1. Thanks, Dawn. A very nice comment!

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