Trade

Each year, they meet by the gazebo, next to the frozen lake.

Wrapped in her parka and gloves, she waits expectantly. Across the ice in the distance, a dot grows larger until he stands before her.

Embracing her, he says, “Macushla, you must move on.”

Her premature wrinkles crease as her brow furrows. “But, I’m not ready.”

“The cost is too high,” he responds.

“Not for me.”

She trades dearly for only twenty minutes with him.  It costs her twenty months of her own lifespan.

Each year, she meets him by the gazebo, on the day of his death.

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story. The beautiful photo this week was taken by Dale Rogerson.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit HERE.

 

41 Comments Add yours

  1. Dale says:

    I am torn between thinking it is a beautiful thing and wanting her to move forward.
    Lovely tale, Brenda.

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    1. I know, me too. It would be so tempting, but probably best for her to move forward. I know it’s difficult though. Thank you so much for your encouraging comments as always, Dale! =)

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      1. Dale says:

        My pleasure

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  2. Dear Brenda,

    I gasped at the end. What a trade off. I’m with Dale. The cost might just be too high. She’d be better off moving on. At any rate, a lovely and well written tale.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Yes, the cost is high but tempting. It would be best for her to move on. Thank you so much, Rochelle, kind comment. =)

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  3. draliman says:

    I think he’s right. Time to move on and live her life.

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    1. Afraid so, it does take time to move on sometimes but the cost for her is high. Thank you for stopping by!! =)

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  4. mydaisydaze says:

    Chilling…and the image is perfect. Nice work.

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    1. Thanks so much for your lovely comment! =)

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  5. plaridel says:

    if it makes her happy, so be it. it’s her life to live.

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    1. That’s very true. It’s often difficult to move on after a great loss. Thank you for commenting. =)

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  6. msjadeli says:

    An original concept, Brenda. They may be meeting on his turf sooner than expected. I can see the allure of her choice.

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind comment. Unfortunately, you may be right. It’s just too tempting for her. Have a lovely weekend! =)

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You are very welcome, Brenda, and you also!

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  7. pennygadd51 says:

    Your story tells us a truth about the power of grief to hold us in the past. It takes enormous emotional energy to recover from the loss of the person dearest to you. The pain of loss is terrible, but the dread of forgetting is even worse, because that then becomes total loss.
    Your main character’s friends need to support and help her to move on; it can be done!

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    1. Thank you for your insightful and compassionate comments, Penny. It is true, the dread of forgetting that significant person is terrifying. I agree, the loss will always be there, but the support of friends and family is crucial to healing and moving forward.

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  8. pennygadd51 says:

    And your story is a most ingenious way of describing the power of grief. The idea of a conscious trade-off – 20 months for 20 minutes – is intriguing and a little chilling.

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  9. Tannille says:

    This would make a great romance novel! Sad yet beautiful.

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    1. Thanks so much, Tannille. Hmmm…it’s possible. Take care!

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  10. Lynn Love says:

    As Penny says, very well written, Brenda. You sum up that feeling of loss, that desperation to hold on so well.

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    1. Thanks so much, Lynn, for your kind comment on the writing. =)

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      1. Lynn Love says:

        My pleasure, Brenda

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  11. Iain Kelly says:

    A heavy price to pay, her love must be very true. Great concept and well written Brenda, well done.

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    1. It was indeed a heavy price and hopefully she’ll be able to move on when the time is right. Thank you, Iain, for your encouraging comment.

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  12. Ann Coleman says:

    The surprise at the end was sad, but it really worked! Honestly, I know many people who would gladly make the same sacrifice for the chance to spend just a little time with a loved one who is gone…..

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    1. Same here. I’ve walked with friends through grief and they often wish for one more conversation to express things that were left unsaid. Thank you for commenting. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas with your family and friends, especially your new grandson. =)

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  13. James McEwan says:

    Being in love is heart breaking and this story shows how much.

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    1. That is true, especially when it is lost. Thank you so much for commenting, James. I hope you have a wonderful holiday!

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  14. Joanne Sisco says:

    The power of love 💕

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    1. Indeed, love is a powerful force. Thank you so much, Joanne, for commenting. =) Merry Christmas to you and yours!!

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  15. What a lovely story. I feel she’s satisfied with her trade.

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    1. She’s not ready to move on. Thanks so much for your kind comment!

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  16. Twenty months for twenty minutes adds up pretty fast–not a good trade. A very creative story and nice take on the prompt.

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    1. She desperately wanted to hang on and I suppose she didn’t care the cost. Thank you, Russell, for your kind comments. =)

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  17. granonine says:

    Sounds as if she’s ready to give up and be with him in death. A thought-provoking story.

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    1. Thanks so much, Linda. Thought provoking is always good. =)

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  18. michael1148humphris says:

    Love is so powerful, I have no words for her. Wishing you well

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    1. It is certainly powerful. Thank you Michael! The same to you. I’ve been traveling a lot and look forward to some slower pace time soon. =)

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  19. Geri Lawhon says:

    Wow, this was fantastic as the ending caught me completely off guard. Thanks for the post.

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    1. Thank you, Geri, for letting me know you enjoyed the story. I’m so glad!

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