Bequeathed

In Marseilles, Samuel met a man with grizzled hair and muddled eyes. Years before, the man nearly discovered a cure for Alzheimer’s. Instead, he contracted the cruel disease.

Drifting into the Corsica harbor, Samuel observed a woman sitting beside the water. In her younger days, she was close to uncovering a passageway between worlds. A stroke interrupted her work, and now she simply stares into the night sky.

Each year, Samuel travelled the world to find the one. He shuddered at the enormity of his task.

Who will I bequeath the gift of health and extra time to this year?

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story. The photo this week was taken by C.E. Ayr.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit HERE.

45 Comments Add yours

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    Oh, that’s a great idea for a longer story. And what a choice to make. How different the world might be if Samuel makes the right choice each time. Great stuff Brenda.

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    1. I’m very happy you enjoyed the story, Iain! It’s unusual for me, but this one flowed easily onto the page. I had several hundred words and the editing was difficult. The world would certainly be a better place if Samuel chooses well.

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  2. Sandra says:

    That’s such an intriguing concept. You should work this up to something longer.

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    1. I’m very glad you like the idea. Especially with everyone’s encouragement, I’ll definitely continue to build this story. Thanks so much, Sandra!

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    I loved the evocativeness of that opening sentence

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    1. A very nice compliment, Neil. Thank you so much!

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  4. draliman says:

    Quite a responsibility! I had no idea where this one was going, nice one 🙂

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    1. It certainly would be, can you imagine? I’m happy to have surprised you! =)

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  5. ceayr says:

    Like Neil, I was hooked from the first line, Brenda.
    Great concept.

    PS No ‘e’ in Ayr 🙂

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    1. Your compliment made me smile. Thanks so much, CE! And, sorry about the typo … fixed it. =)

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    2. Also, thanks for the inspiring photo.

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  6. Dear Brenda,

    I agree with the general consensus. This is a story to pursue and expand. As I watch my MIL in the final stages of the cruel disease, hoping the suffering will soon end, I felt this one deeply. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you, Rochelle. I appreciate your encouragement. I’m very sorry about your MIL, so very sad.

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  7. Ann Coleman says:

    I agree with the other comments: you could definitely turn this idea into a novel! And a very interesting one at that.

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    1. Thanks so much, Ann. That’s very encouraging. For some reason, this story flowed easily. I think I’ll enjoy growing it. =)

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  8. GHLearner says:

    What a cruel decision to make, to judge people’s life-worth upon their accomplishments. Superb story telling, and I also think this could go further.

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  9. plaridel says:

    i hope he can find the one or die trying. either way he’ll be the better of it.

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    1. Each year, he looks for and chooses one. Thank you for reading!!

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  10. Really classy, what a brilliant idea. Great stuff

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    1. Thank you so much. I appreciate the encouragement! =)

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  11. pennygadd51 says:

    A terrific concept, Brenda! So much potential for exploring what it means to be human. And what a hook for your opening line: “In Marseilles, Samuel met a man with grizzled hair and muddled eyes.” Brilliant!

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    1. Thank you so much, Penny. I’ll happily take your words of encouragement in pursuing a longer version of this story. I’ve really appreciated everyone’s support. =)

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  12. msjadeli says:

    You just never know. Serendipity works in mysterious ways. I agree with Iain, this would be a great beginning to book, where the angel visits different people.

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    1. It does work in mysterious ways. Thanks so much for your encouragement. =)

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You are very welcome, Brenda.

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  13. Tannille says:

    I want more. There is so much meat!

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story, Tannille! =)

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  14. Nobbinmaug says:

    Intriguing. I want to know more about Samuel. There’s an enormous potential for depth there. How does he make his decisions? How long has he been at this? At what point does he get jaded and pick by an eenie, meenie, minie, moe method? Does he lean toward helping humanity? Or is there a reason he would choose one over the other? Is he corruptable? Can he leverage his powers? Sell them to the highest bidder? How “human” is he? Could he be swayed to help a pretty woman with an ailing parent?

    I obviously agree that you should look into expanding this.

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    1. What a lovely reply. I’m sorry for not responding until now. My family and I left for a road trip and just returned a couple days ago. Before I left, I wrote down your questions as an impetus to contemplate this story and character further. On my trip, I made notes and expanded the story a little. It’s definitely one I’ll look to grow after I’m finished with the project I’m currently working on. Thank you so much for taking the time to comment and for your your wonderful questions! Take care! =)

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      1. Nobbinmaug says:

        No apologies necessary. I hope you had a good trip and my questions help in your expansion.

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  15. Dale says:

    Oh, this was wonderful, Brenda. Like everyone else, you drew me in, immediately. I suddenly thought of the movie “Seven Pounds” with Will Smith where he decides who gets what from him… a most difficult choice indeed…

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    1. Thank you so much, Dale, that’s very encouraging. I left shortly after writing this for a ten day vacation with my family so I’m sorry for not responding until now. I really enjoyed the movie “Seven Pounds.” It was very powerful. I have some research and thinking to do for this character. I honestly might try to grow the story when I’m finished with the project I’m working on now. Thank you again!! =)

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      1. Dale says:

        My pleasure!

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  16. This sounds like the script for a longer film…. and I can almost imagine Samuel being played by Morgan Freeman.

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    1. Love Morgan Freeman and great choice for Samuel! Sorry for not responding until now, have been travelling. Thank you so much for the encouraging comment, Bjorn! =)

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  17. Laurie Bell says:

    Love the concept in this, you could certainly right more. I’m fascinated.

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    1. Laurie Bell says:

      OMG ‘write’ more

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    2. Thanks so much, Laurie, for that encouragement. I’m happy you are fascinated with Samuel! =)

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  18. michael1148humphris says:

    Fascinating story, I enjoyed it

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    1. I’m so happy you enjoyed the story. Thanks so much for letting me know, Michael! =)

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  19. I don’t think he can make a wrong choice just a best choice.

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    1. Very true, good point! Thanks, Dawn, for reading and commenting! =)

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  20. Create Space says:

    How lucky we are to meet him every year! Wonderfully imaginative!!

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    1. Thanks so much, Marie!! Love your encouragement. =)

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