One Wish

He imagined he heard the water boiler whistle and raced to the kitchen.  Turning the corner, he expected to see her; bathed in the early morning light, leaning against the sink, arms buried to her elbows in sudsy water.  But, then he remembered.  The electricity was off, the water had stopped, and she was gone.  No birds chirped.  No children squealed from the park across the street.

Three weeks before, an enchanting elderly woman knocked on his door.  When she revealed he had one wish, he never expected the consequences.

He simply declared, “I just want it all to stop.”

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story. The photo this week was provided by A. Noni Mouse.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, click here.

52 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Just as well he didn’t wish to be made a milkshake

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    1. Love it…needed a good laugh. Thanks, Neil!

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    2. trishsplace says:

      Strawberry. Oh no, caramel with malt!

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  2. msjadeli says:

    Your story is equal parts humor and horror. I love that mix. Well-done, Brenda!

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    1. A little bit of my inner thoughts and an old Twilight Zone episode! I’m very glad you enjoyed. Thanks so much for letting me know.

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You’re very welcome.

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Good story Brenda. Be careful what you wish for!

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    1. That’s right! Thanks so much, Iain.

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  4. JT Twissel says:

    Oh my. A lesson for modern man!

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    1. 🙂 Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

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  5. Great story! A modern-day Midas.

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    1. Thanks so much for your kind comment. Hopefully he too can resend his wish like Midas!

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  6. Tannille says:

    What a punch B! Loved the fairytale quality.

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    1. In my head, I took a bow. (haha) Thank you so much!

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  7. That gave me the chills! Beautifully done, Brenda.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. I’m glad to give you the chills. 🙂 Thank you much for your kind comment, Susan!

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  8. ceayr says:

    Brilliant, Brenda.
    Love it

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    1. Well, that made me smile! Thank you for your very kind comment. I’m happy you enjoyed the story.

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  9. Now I am wondering what he actually meant. Any clues?

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    1. I don’t think he thought but reacted. He should have taken a minute to consider. 🙂

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  10. trentpmcd says:

    My motto in life has always been, “Careful what you wish for, it might come true”…

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    1. It’s a very good motto, Trent. Often, we think we know what we want until we get it. Thanks for stopping by. 🙂

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  11. Seems he got more than he wished for. Nice one Brenda

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    1. Thank you, Keith. That’s often the case … we get more than we wish for or something else entirely.

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  12. plaridel says:

    … and then he woke up from a really bad dream. the end. 🙂

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    1. That sounds nice! 🙂

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  13. draliman says:

    Oh dear, has he learned nothing from genie-themed films and TV? 🙂

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    1. I know … if it were me … well … I’d don’t know. I might make the same mistake. 🙂

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  14. Ann Coleman says:

    This was good! And definitely a reminder to “be careful what you wish for!”

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    1. I’m happy you enjoyed it, Ann! We certainly stop and consider before choosing. 🙂

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  15. wmqcolby says:

    Be careful what you wish for now has become, be afraid — be VERY afraid! Nice work, Brenda!

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    1. Thanks so much, Kent!

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  16. Tessa says:

    Wow, talk about being careful what you wish for. “It al to stop” wow, everything just stops where it is. No sound, no movement — I can’t imagine it. Great job!

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    1. Thanks, Tessa! Yeah, he probably should have thought more about the results of his wish. =)

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  17. Dear Brenda,

    Severe consequences. Puts me in mind of King Midas. Well done. Very well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you so much, that made my day!

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  18. Gabriella says:

    Perfect example of the adage ‘be careful what you wish for.’ I also like how your story makes us both smile and shudder.

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    1. I’m very glad for that, mission accomplished. =) Thanks so much!

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  19. Great story Brenda! A definite surprise.

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    1. I’m glad you were surprised! Thanks so much. =)

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  20. James McEwan says:

    He needs to find that old lady, come on, we are allowed three wishes; aren’t we?

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    1. Yeah, maybe that’s the catch. You have to find her first. =)

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  21. Bill says:

    Yes. I’ve heard that we ought to be careful what we wish for. Good story. Enjoyed it.

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    1. We certainly should. Thanks so much, Bill!

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  22. You have to be very careful how you pick your words when wishing, it’s not something to be done in haste. Hopefully he’ll find a way to reverse it all. Nice take on the prompt.

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    1. For sure. Blurting something out is never good in any situation. Thanks, Michael!

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  23. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh no. A good reminder to be careful what you wish for!

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    1. Yes, it certainly is. Take a breath and consider. =)

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  24. Sandra says:

    I really think he needs to be more precise with his wishes. good one, Brenda

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    1. That’s certainly true. Thanks, Sandra! =)

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  25. subroto says:

    Oops. She put him on the spot there. Should have had a phone a friend option.

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    1. Haha…that would have helped.

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