Someday

When the portal opened, few chose to stay. Who could resist a place where you can taste the sky?  Where music blows with the wind through the trees.  A place with white sandy beaches and pristine water.  Where the landscape is unmarred by human hands.  Where you can swim with the bright colored fish and fly with the eagles.  Who wouldn’t leave this place for that?  

But, there he was.  In the old not the new.  He watched from a distance.  The house in the photo stood just over the ridge.   She was there.  Someday he’d leave.  Just not now.

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story. The photo this week was provided by Ted Strutz.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit HERE.

59 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    sometimes there are better places than paradise

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  2. He should have taken her along. Wouldn’t both of them love it there?

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    1. She wasn’t ready to leave the old behind. =)

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  3. granonine says:

    I love the mood you’ve set. The man’s faithfulness and love come through very clearly.

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    1. Your comments made me smile. I’m so glad for that. Thanks, Linda! =)

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    I can relate to this, as many ‘older’ people might, there is a definite attraction in the perceived simpler times past. Great work Brenda.

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    1. Thank you so much, Iain. I’m happy you enjoyed the story. I do the same, think back on a less complicated past and long for it. I think I was reading your story while you were reading mine. =)

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  5. Nobbinmaug says:

    Define paradise. There can be more found in a smile and a pair of eyes. A touch, a kiss, an embrace can be better than any place.

    Your description reminds me of Stevie Wonder’s “Saturn,” where he imagines a utopia on Saturn.

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    1. Beautiful! Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments.

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  6. Dear Brenda,

    It sounds like a lovely place to stay. Particularly the part about swimming with colorful fish in clear water. 😉 Well described.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Yes, that especially would be a draw for me as I know it is for you. Thanks so much, Rochelle!

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  7. Wonderful story! I love the descriptions of the other world.

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    1. Thanks, Joshua! Your comments made me smile. =)

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  8. plaridel says:

    if that’s not love then i don’t know what it is. 🙂

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    1. Certainly true! Thank you for stopping by, Plaridel. =)

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  9. msjadeli says:

    Each has their own life and their own decisions. Who knows, that might have been bait, and once they got there… I like the open-endedness of your story, Brenda.

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    1. Thanks so much, Lisa! Nice twist to the story. =)

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You’re very welcome.

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  10. Tannille says:

    I don’t know why I was thinking of some kind of time travel portal. Fantastic atmosphere B.

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    1. Thanks so much, T! It is a travel portal. I love the concept. Would really like to have one, except one that would take me from one place to the other easily here on this planet without travel bans and fear of COVID. =)

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      1. Tannille says:

        Now that’s a dream!

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  11. draliman says:

    Stick with the familiar. Sometimes it’s hard to leave it behind.

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    1. Very true indeed! =)

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  12. Beautifully described! I would love to taste the sky and swim with the fishes too 🙂

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    1. And music all around … thank you so much for your kind comment!! =)

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  13. Sandra says:

    Some lovely descriptive phrases in this, Brenda.

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    1. I’m so pleased you enjoyed, Sandra! =)

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  14. Dale says:

    This was beautifully written, Brenda. I’m glad not everyone goes off for the new…

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    1. Not yet, anyways. =) Thanks so much, Dale.

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  15. Dora says:

    He sacrificed a wondrous world through the portal for life with the woman he loved! Yep, that’s love alright! 😄 A pleasure to read.

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    1. I’m very glad you enjoyed the story! Thank you for the thoughtful comments. =)

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  16. I found your story emotionally powerful and subtly haunting. Well done.

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    1. Those are very nice comments. Thanks so much!

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  17. siobhan1967 says:

    If more humans keep going its not going to remain untouched for long. I always think those kinds of paradise aren’t all they’re made out to be. Great take on the prompt.

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    1. That’s true. Thanks so much for your kind comment on the story! =)

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  18. Evocative description of a paradise brought to mind, and a hope of his dream coming true one day.
    Have a wonderful day … Be Safe
    Isadora 😎

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    1. Thank you so much, Isadora! Stay safe as well. =)

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  19. A beautiful description of a special place. Someday, one day, never?

    Here’s mine!

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    1. Someday, for sure. Thanks so much, Keith! =)

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  20. James McEwan says:

    A nice story about the power of love. ( I hope he was not a sinister stalker.

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    1. Hey, I hadn’t thought of that until you mentioned it. Thanks so much, James, for the kind comments. =)

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  21. subroto says:

    Nicely done. Paradise can wait, his heaven lies just over the ridge.

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    1. For sure! Thanks so much. =)

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  22. Bill says:

    Excellent. I enjoyed your story. You told it right.

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    1. Thanks so much, Bill, for your kind comments! =)

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      1. Bill says:

        You’re welcome, Brenda.

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  23. The minute I read portal I get the chills.

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    1. I understand what you mean. But, I do love the idea of portals to other worlds! =) Thank you for stopping by.

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  24. Even in paradise you will need company

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    1. That’s true. Thanks so much for reading, Bjorn. Hope you are well! =)

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  25. Mike says:

    Paradise can be a cool breeze, and a friendly smile, but to swim in the warm sea, that would be double paradise.

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    1. My sentiment exactly, give me the sea with colorful fish. Thanks for stopping by, Mike! =)

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  26. Lovely story Brenda. I enjoyed it very much.

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    1. I’m so pleased you enjoyed the story. Thank you for saying so. =)

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  27. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh nice story! The longing and sadness seep through the tale.

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    1. Thanks so much, Laurie! =)

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  28. Ann Coleman says:

    I loved this one, Brenda! Love is so powerful….

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    1. It truly is. I’m very happy you enjoyed the story, Ann! Thank you for saying so. =)

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