The Dark Times

Walking along the road of life, Rebecca fell through the cracks.  In the gloomy world below, she felt compelled to follow the darkened passageways that spiraled downward. 

“I can do this,” she whispered numbly.

No, you can’t,” the voices hissed.

She stumbled yet kept moving.  

At long last, she declared, “I can do this!” 

A tunnel leading upward lay before her.  A light flickered at the end.  Rebecca ascended.  Reaching out her hands toward the light, she rose through the cracks. The sun kissed her face, and she sighed.  Her time in the below was over.  At least for now.  

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story. The photo this week was provided by CE Ayr.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit here.

44 Comments Add yours

  1. oneta hayes says:

    Long may Rebecca continue her “I can do this” attitude!

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    1. The best attitude to have to overcome. Thank you for reading and commenting, Oneta!

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  2. ahtdoucette says:

    I fell in love with this story at the first line, because – whoa that first line! The rest compares favorably to Plato’s the Cave to my mind. What a fascinating story/allegory you’ve given us here. Very well done.

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    1. I like “whoa” and am very glad you enjoyed the story! Thank you so much, Anne, for the kind and thoughtful comments.

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Lovely use of metaphor from the prompt, and a nice bit of hope – although the last sentence adds an ominous hint! Well done.

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    1. Guess I wanted to depict the constant struggle for some. Thanks so much, Iain, for reading and commenting. Stay safe!

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  4. plaridel says:

    the first step is always the hardest. she’s on her way.

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    1. It is and she is! Thanks so much, Plaridel, for commenting!

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  5. Tannille says:

    The underworld sounds like a fascinating place. Very atmospheric and intriguing B!

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    1. When I first started writing the story, I thought of “Neverwhere” by Neil Gaiman. 🙂 But, then, I took another direction. Thanks so much for reading!!

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  6. Frank Hubeny says:

    I am glad she found her way out of the cracks.

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    1. Yes, she worked hard at it and found success. Thanks much for reading, Frank, and commenting! 🙂

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  7. Love this, so much is conveyed in just a few words. It can be so easy to fall through those cracks and stay there because of those voices. Glad Rebecca found the strength to challenge them and climb out again!

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    1. I’m so glad you liked the story. Many of us need to fight this fight from time to time. I think this is especially true during this time. Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I hope you are staying well.

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  8. Dear Brenda,

    Lovely and metaphorical story. I love the way you used the sidewalk and not the string. 😉 Attitude does determine altitude, doesn’t it?

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. I like that, “attitude determines altitude.” Thank you, Rochelle, for taking time to read my story and for you kind comment. Be well!!

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  9. ceayr says:

    This is great, Brenda, and, as mentioned above, that first sentence is a nailer!

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    1. Thanks so much, CE, for your kind comments!

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  10. Dale says:

    It takes strength of all kinds to get out once we’ve fallen through the cracks of life. I love what you did here, Brenda.

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    1. It certainly does take strength. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story, Dale!

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  11. Lovely, uplifting story, Brenda.

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    1. Thank you so much, Susan, truly! I’m glad you enjoyed.

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  12. I like the determination of spirit. This is 2020 for sure. Here’s to getting out again.
    -David

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    1. Back at you! Sometimes it does take great determination, and, like you said, especially for 2020. Thank you for your comments!!

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  13. Nobbinmaug says:

    Oh, those omnipresent internal voices. I don’t know if there is such a thing as fighting them off for good. I love the metaphorical use of the prompt.

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    1. I think it’s a life long struggle, but we can grow stronger with each victory over those voices. I’m very glad you enjoyed the story. Thank you!!

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  14. Ann Coleman says:

    I love the inspiration and hope in this story!

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed, Ann. Thanks so much for letting me know. It means a lot!

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  15. draliman says:

    Lovely story, and great first line. It’s the sort of first line that draws you in immediately.

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    1. Well, that’s encouraging. Thanks so much for letting me know, and I’m glad you enjoyed, Draliman! Hope you are well!

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  16. magarisa says:

    Vivid storytelling. You endeared me to the protagonist immediately.

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    1. I’m so glad to hear that, very encouraging, Magarisa! Thank you for letting me know. Take care!

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      1. magarisa says:

        You’re welcome!

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  17. Mike says:

    I felt the mood, far to many fall though the cracks, if only more could climb back.

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    1. That’s a nice compliment. I’m glad you felt the mood in the story. It is true, there are far to many and I fear it will be the case this season. Thanks for stopping by, Mike!

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  18. Laurie Bell says:

    This is beautifully described. The imagery is so confronting. Her determination once the decision is made is gripping! Well done

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    1. Thank you so much, Laurie, your comments are very encouraging!

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  19. msjadeli says:

    Perspective is the ruling force, I agree. It can get a person through anything. Glad she got back to the light.

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    1. It truly is. Determination, though difficult to hold on to during these times, is key! Thanks so much for stopping by!

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You’re most welcome, Brenda 🙂

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  20. notestowomen says:

    Great story about perseverance and determination, Brenda.

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    1. Thanks so much! 🙂

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      1. notestowomen says:

        You’re welcome 🙂

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