I Can Help

Just because I have white hair doesn’t mean my head is full of cottage cheese.  I have seen and experienced the beginning up until now.  I watched the sky as they arrived.  No one heeded my warnings.  They secretly assimilated into our way of life.  They destroyed all that was dear. Everything considered old and outdated was replaced with shiny and new.  They are gone now.  It is time to pick up the pieces and reassemble the parts.  I can help.  I have been here since the beginning.  I remember what was good.  

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story. The photo this week was provided by Roger Bultot.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit here.

53 Comments Add yours

  1. Michael says:

    A time traveller perhaps. Going back often seems preferable, but is not always so..

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    1. I wasn’t really thinking of a time traveller. But, that’s okay, I always say, “Let the reader decide.” 🙂 Thank you so much for commenting!

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  2. Dear Brenda,

    I don’t know if I imagine him to be a time traveler so much as someone who’s watched aliens take over and he’s the only one who seems to be aware of it. Good beginning to a longer story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Good eye! And, because he’s older he might be overlooked but can help because he’s been around and seen the time before. Thanks so much for your kind comment, Rochelle, as always! 🙂

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    Ah, but does he or she remember correctly? If not, there could be some unusual hybrids

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    1. Hmm, good point. The memory is a tricky thing, so there could be indeed. Thanks for commenting, Neil. 🙂

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    An alien invasion, machines taking over, or, I think, it is perhaps all in their head.

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    1. Oh, I like that story-line, Iain! Especially the bit about it all being in their heads (hmm). Thank you for commenting! 🙂

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  5. JT Twissel says:

    Intriguing and a little bittersweet as well.

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    1. I’m very glad, Jan, you found the story intriguing. Thank you for letting me know. I hope you are doing well! 🙂

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  6. msjadeli says:

    Brenda, your story shines with hope. 2021 here we come. I think you should lead the way!

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    1. Aw, what a sweet comment. 🙂 Thanks, Lisa!!

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You’re welcome!

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  7. Tannille says:

    I vote for Aliens. Although maybe the protagonist is losing their mind. Great voice, B.

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    1. Thanks so much! Hmm, the character seeing reality through a confused mind would be an interesting twist.

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      1. Tannille says:

        You could really jerk with the reader.

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  8. Such a lovely bittersweet story. There is hope for us yet, I am not sure our modernity is such a great idea.

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    1. I don’t think so. I feel sometimes that we have forgotten what’s really important. Thank you for your thoughtful comments!

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  9. draliman says:

    Time for a fresh start – at least someone remembers how it used to be.

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    1. It is and he does! So glad for that. 🙂

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  10. Sandra says:

    Those who simply observe often have much to offer. Nice story, Brenda.

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    1. I think so too, if we would just listen. Thanks much, Sandra! 🙂

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  11. Perhaps he knows something we don’t; either that or a very active imagination. And I really like the white hair/cottage cheese analogy! I’ll think of it next time I look in the mirror!

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    1. He knows. 🙂 The analogy is sort of a joke my family and I have now that the white hairs on my head are surpassing the black.

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  12. granonine says:

    Very few people want to heed the warnings of the elders among us. Too bad. They’ve had time to learn from time itself.

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    1. I know. It’s sad. I suppose we don’t notice so much until we begin to move in that direction ourselves. Thanks for commenting, Linda!

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  13. oldentimes says:

    Too bad, too sad. Will anyone listen? Will anyone care?

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    1. I wonder myself! Thank you for reading and commenting.

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  14. Ann Coleman says:

    I liked this one, Brenda! And in many ways, it strikes me as very timely too.

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    1. Yes, in what ways will we rebuild when all this is over? Thank you so much for commenting, Ann.

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  15. plaridel says:

    i think he’s losing it. can he help? of course not. it’s all in his imagination. 🙂

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    1. Hmm, this seems to be a recurring theme. Others read it that way too! Interesting storyline. Thanks for commenting, Plaridel!

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  16. Dale says:

    Too often the older folks are dismissed as not having anything of import to say. Much can be learned through them. Wonderful story.

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    1. That is certainly true, the older we get the more we are disregarded in general. Not always but often. Thanks so much, Dale, for stopping by!

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      1. Dale says:

        Too often 😉

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  17. pennygadd51 says:

    I love your opening sentence; a brilliant hook! Like Neil, I suspect that the world he remembers will turn out different from the original. An alien invasion as a metaphor for technological ‘progress’ – yes, nice, I like it!

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    1. I’m so happy you enjoyed the story. Thanks so much for the kind and encouraging comments!

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  18. Cottage cheese for brains? Sounds rather comforting.

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    1. True. Sometimes I want to just sit and stare. Thank you for commenting, Russell!

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  19. mjlstories says:

    Fantastic opening line! And those aliens hinted at could be real or in his head – both scenarios intriguing!

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    1. I’m so glad you like the opening line and found the story intriguing!!

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  20. ooooooooooh, I don’t know who ‘they’ are but: a. I don’t like them and b. I wanna know more … 😉

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    1. The fact you want to know more is good!! Thank you for commenting, Na’ama!

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      1. 🙂 My pleasure!

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  21. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh clever. The only one who knows the truth can only watch the invasion play out. Well done

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    1. Thanks so much, Laurie! I’m glad you enjoyed the story. 🙂

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  22. Junie-Jesh says:

    Love the first line, Brenda! I can see many like your stories. Am happy for you that you found a niche! Who would have thought when you lived in Hong Kong (right city?) that you would move to France, and you would start developing your writing gift. Wishing you a merry Christmas and a wonderful 2021, to recuperate from the chaos and losses we incurred this year!

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    1. Yes, we moved to France from Hong Kong. The group of writers here on Friday Fictioneers are very encouraging!! I’m so glad you like the first line. Merry Christmas to you and yours as well. Looking forward with hope to 2021!

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      1. Junie-Jesh says:

        As I am replying Christmas is already into evening. Hope there were things you could enjoy today. This feast is the hardest with feeling home sick (depending of where you feel home is). For many it may take a few years, before France becomes your “home”
        You should definitely pursue writing! I am amazed every time, and happy you have found your niche! Am expecting a novel or something in print in a few years:)

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      2. I really appreciate your kind and encouraging comments, Jesh!!

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  23. Cool and clever take on the photo prompt, Brenda!

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      1. You’re welcome 🙂

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