The Right Train

I stand on the platform and wait.  Some trains speed through the station, and I do not have the chance to board.  When a train slows down, I ask myself, do I get on or let it pass?  Others give advice.  But, I must choose for myself.  There are times, as a train leaves the station, doubt assails me.  I ask myself, do I chase after the train?  No, I could never catch it.  I must let it go, put aside regrets, and prepare for the next one.  After-all, I believe, the right train will eventually come along.

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story.  The photo this week was provided by Alicia Jamtaas.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, click here.

58 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Maybe there is no such thing as the right train? Just a suitable one

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    1. Yes, that’s certainly a wise statement. Thanks so much for commenting! =)

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    But is standing and waiting the best way, or does she need to start catching a few trains to see which one is the right one? Nice metaphor.

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    1. Active or passive, hmm, guess she should probably try a few. Live on the edge. =) Thanks, Iain, for the encouraging comment on the writing.

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      1. Iain Kelly says:

        You’re welcome 🙂

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  3. plaridel says:

    in the final analysis, methinks there’s no right or right train. when in doubt, just follow your heart.

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    1. True, it’s always best to follow your heart. Thanks, Plaridel! =)

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  4. JT Twissel says:

    My philosophy is Jump on the Train!

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    1. I like it. You’ve got an adventurous spirit! =) Thanks, Jan, for commenting. Stay well!

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  5. elmowrites says:

    Sometimes it’s the wrong train, but there’s usually a way to get off again if you board it. Standing on the platform is fine, unless your intention was to go somewhere else.

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    1. True, Jen! Thanks much for commenting. =)

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  6. Bear says:

    So many trains… so little time. Great story.

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    1. Your comment reminds me of Willy Wonka, “So much time and so little to do…stop…reverse that!” =) Thanks so much. I’m happy your enjoyed!

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      1. Bear says:

        Funny you should say that… I just got the Dvd of Willy Wonka… the old one with Gene Wilder. It’s on our agenda to watch this weekend…maybe again Monday when the next snow storm gets here. 🙂

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      2. That’s great! The Gene Wilder version is my favorite indeed. Have a nice warm weekend! =)

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  7. Dora says:

    Waiting on the right “train” is the hardest part.

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    1. For sure. Waiting is not my strong suit! Thanks for stopping by, Dora! =)

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  8. notestowomen says:

    Nice one, Brenda. Sometimes you have to wait a while for the right train to come along.

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    1. Thanks so much! It’s true, sometimes it’s about waiting, but difficult to do. =)

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      1. notestowomen says:

        You’re welcome, Brenda. And you’re right. Sometimes, the waiting is the difficult part.

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  9. Dale says:

    Maybe we have to make it the right train! Lovely story!

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    1. Well, that’s a good point! =) I’m happy you enjoyed. Take care!

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  10. Tannille says:

    There is always another train. Get metaphors for life B!

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    1. For the most part. Thanks so much, T!

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  11. Nobbinmaug says:

    It is hard to know which train is the right one. Watching them go by probably won’t help her decide. Nice metaphoric take.

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    1. It’s difficult to watch them go by and wait for the right one. But, my character (unlike me) has patience. =) I’m glad you enjoyed!

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  12. draliman says:

    It’s good to make the right choice, but at some point you’ve got to go for “close enough” or you’ll be stuck at the station forever…

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    1. That’s a very good point! We often do that in life, close enough. Thanks much for commenting, Ali! Hope you are well. =)

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  13. Sandra says:

    Better to get on the wrong train and enjoy the ride for what it is, than never to leave the station. Just a thought. Great metaphor, Brenda

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    1. It’s true, sometimes you have to give it a go and see where it takes you. =) Thanks so much for your kind comment, Sandra.

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  14. Dear Brenda,

    Everyone has said what I wanted to day. 😉 She’ll never know if it’s the right train if she doesn’t take a ride. On the other hand…well written, as always.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. I agree. It’s a conundrum. Your comment on the writing brought a big smile!! Thanks so much, Rochelle. I hope you have a nice weekend. =)

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  15. ceayr says:

    Wow, Brenda, deep stuff here, I love it.
    As you can see from the comments above, there is no right or wrong, we all make our own choices.
    And Shakespeare, or maybe Charlie Brown, said: Advice is free and that’s all it’s worth

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    1. I’m feeling a bit philosophical as of late. Very pleased you enjoyed, CE! Hope you are well. =)

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  16. mjlstories says:

    Don’t wait too long… Loved this.

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    1. True, true! Thanks so much, Miranda. =)

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  17. What a metaphor for life. You made me wonder — will her train come? Will mine?

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    1. Thanks so much! I’m glad to make you wonder. =)

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  18. msjadeli says:

    A lovely metaphor for life. Haruki Murakami likes to write about trains.

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    1. Thank you so much for your comment and tip. I’ll have to look at some of his writings. =)

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You are very welcome and my pleassure 🙂

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  19. James McEwan says:

    I like how you struggle to decide. Only if you have a destination in mind and a ticket for life will you catch the right train – waiting is doomed to a life on a dusty platform.

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    1. Hmm! Good point. Thanks much for commenting, James. =)

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  20. Ann Coleman says:

    What a profound post! Only we know which trains we should get on, and which ones we should let pass. But others are so very willing to share their opinions on the matter.

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    1. It’s true, only we can choose our way. Thank you for your very encouraging comment on the story, Ann. =)

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  21. It’s all about knowing which is the right train. Who can say they’ve always travelled the right track?

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    1. It’s true. None can say they have always traveled the right track. I certainly can’t. Thank you for commenting, Keith! =)

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  22. Well, I’m a day late and a dollar short. Everyone has already said what I would have said. Wonderful take on the prompt!

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    1. Thanks so much, Alicia!! =)

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  23. ahtdoucette says:

    Wow, I love the “what is this about” feel to this story. Like one time visiting Italy by train, I remember leaving this small town I’d stayed in for the night, can’t even remember why or what the town was. (Man, goosebumps). I was waiting on this platform and realized after waiting for some time that the train I wanted was called something other than I thought, and either I’d missed it or it was running behind on its way. Eventually I got on the right train to the right place. LOL, I think that might have also been the night I was staying in the wrong town because it had a name similar to the town I wanted to visit and that’s why I can’t remember what it was. But they served me pizza with disgusting fish toppings. The people were so nice. They could see I was a little out of sorts, so they were extra nice, and I quietly took the disgusting fish topping off when they couldn’t see me, so I wouldn’t have to see them seeing me take it off and hide it in a napkin maybe? It was so gross. All seafood is gross but that was atrocious. Ugh it is killing me I can’t remember the name of that town. Funny the surreal things that happen in actual real world travel. I miss traveling so much since Covid. So, so much.

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    1. I’m very happy to have triggered your curiosity, given you something to ponder, Anne. Thank you for letting me know. I’m also glad you got on the right train at the right time in Italy. It’s no fun to be lost. Love pizza. But, not with fish sauce. Must be an acquired taste. On my visits to Italy, I’ve been so pleased with how friendly and kind the Italian people are. Hope you remember the town with the kind people! That’s what it’s all about. I, too, miss traveling very much and look forward to a day I can again. =)

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  24. Laurie Bell says:

    Fascinating choice here. I wonder when the leap of faith will be made. Nicely written

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    1. She’ll know when. =) Thanks for commenting, Laurie!

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  25. subroto says:

    She is never going to get anywhere if she keeps standing. Or maybe that is the intention. In these times it’s probably better to stay put 🙂

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    1. It is indeed. =) Thanks so much for commenting!

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  26. granonine says:

    An apt metaphor of life and all its changes. Well done 🙂

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    1. Thanks so much, Linda! =)

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