Promise

The door to the apartment building stands open.  The dingy hallway beyond is anything but inviting.  But, I made a promise.

I peek through the slot into the mailbox.  It is empty.  She is already at home. I follow the man who entered the building before me.  He was back to finish the job.  As we climb the stairs together, the fluorescent light bulb flickers.  The man glances over his shoulder.  He does not see me. 

I was not a violent man in life.  In death, now that’s another story.  I won’t let him hurt her.  I made a promise.

~~

This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story. The photo this week was provided by Roger Bultot.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit here.

Stay safe, stay well, and thank you for stopping by!

49 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    A ghost with anger issues!

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    1. Well, he did make a promise. Thanks for commenting. =)

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  2. granonine says:

    A ghost with revenge in mind is probably not a safe ghost 🙂

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    1. Very true, and this ghost as a protector makes him a force to be reckoned with. =) Thanks for reading and commenting, Linda!

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  3. There to protect her, just as he promised. Nice one Brenda.

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    1. That’s it exactly, Keith! So glad you saw that and enjoyed the story. =)

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice twist on the ghost story Brenda, I like the idea of a protector 🙂

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    1. I also like the idea of having protectors we cannot see. Who knows, right? Thanks so much for the nice commens, Iain. =)

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  5. trentpmcd says:

    A ghostly protector – a more down to earth, and violent, version of a guardian angel.

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    1. He will do what it takes to protect her so that what happened to him doesn’t happen to her. I think he’s kind of like the guardian angels on the movie Legion. =) Thanks so much for commenting, Trent!

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  6. Oooooo! Good one!

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    1. I like your reaction!! Thanks so much. =)

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  7. plaridel says:

    i applaud his determination. he had to fulfill his promise even in the afterlife.

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    1. Exactly! Thanks so much for commenting, Plaridel. =)

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  8. jenne49 says:

    Oh, I love this. The twist at the end. Faithful beyond death in protecting her.

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    1. I’m very glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for letting me know. =)

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  9. JT Twissel says:

    We could all use such a guardian angel!

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    1. We certainly could! Thank you so much for reading and writing a nice comment, Jan. =)

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  10. Tannille says:

    Reminds me of the 90s movie Ghost. I want to know more! Great stuff B

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    1. Thank so much, T! There are some similarities between the story and the movie. Like the comparison. =)

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  11. draliman says:

    A promise that ties him to the mortal realm. Maybe he can move on once he’s “taken care” of this little problem 🙂

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    1. I think once he’s kept his promise, he’ll be free to move on. Thanks, Ali, for stopping by! =)

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  12. James McEwan says:

    Nicely turned. I wish I had a guardian ready at every moment. Mind you I wouldn’t want to fell haunted, I get enough of that from those who are still with us.

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    1. Haha…I’m with you on that. =) Thanks so much for your kind comment!

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  13. Nichika says:

    My gosh, that was so good! Hope he’s able to move on after fulfilling his promise.

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    1. Thank you so much for your wonderful reaction! Let’s hope… =)

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  14. A lovely eerie story Brenda! Good take on the prompt.

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    1. Thanks so much. I’m glad you enjoyed! =)

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  15. notestowomen says:

    I see him more as a guardian angel.

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    1. He is of a sort, her protector! =) Thank you for stopping by.

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  16. Dear Brenda,

    Stunning reveal in the last lines. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks so much, Rochelle, I’m so glad you enjoyed. =)

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  17. ahtdoucette says:

    Creepy vengeance! I like it.

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    1. I’m so happy you enjoyed the story. Thank you for letting me know! =)

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  18. pennygadd51 says:

    I liked very much the way you told that story, gradually revealing that your protagonist was a ghost. The last paragraph takes us a step further in knowing that this ghost may become quite dangerous. Nicely written, Brenda.

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind comments, Penny. They make me smile. I’m sorry for not responding until now. Last week was a difficult one and I got side-tracked. Take care!! =)

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  19. I like the way you build up the story, from mysterious to creepy. leaves us pondering what lay behind the promise and what form the revenge took !

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed the build up and you were left wondering. Thank you for letting me know! =)

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  20. msjadeli says:

    Fabulous story, Brenda. You told that just right. I love the idea he is holding to his promise to protect her, even in the afterlife.

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    1. Well, that made me smile. Thank you so much for your very kind comments, Lisa!! =)

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You’re very welcome, Brenda.

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  21. At least this ghost is putting his powers to good use besides haunting others. Imaginative story Brenda.

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    1. He sure is. Thanks so much, Fatima! =)

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  22. A special gift for the receiver, to be cared for even from another realm.
    Interesting write, Brenda. I liked it very much.
    Isaodra 😎

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story, Isadora! Thank you for letting me know. Take care!! =)

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  23. Laurie Bell says:

    Ooooooo a ghostly saviour. Glad he’s still hanging around to help her.

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed, Laurie! =) Thank you for letting me know.

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  24. Ann Coleman says:

    I loved this one! It is sweet and slightly scary all at the same time. And the photo fits perfectly!

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    1. Thank you, Ann, for your kind comments. They made me smile! I hope you are having a nice week. =)

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