Choice

The quiet of the morning replaced the soothing sounds of the night.  The tide had pulled away from the shore, taking with it the gentle rushing waves.  I stood as the sun rose and looked to the horizon.  

What waited for me?  Did it matter?  My mother had sold me to a stranger, a much older man.  

Warm breath against my neck told me I was not alone. He whispered in my ear, “The boat is on the other side of the cove.  We must go.  Are you ready?”  

I nodded, “Yes,” without hesitation.  At least this was my choice.

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story.  The beautiful photo this week was provided by C. E. Ayer.

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit here.

64 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    A satisyingly compact and complete story

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    1. Thanks so much, Neil, for the nice comment! =)

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    Excellent Brenda, so much said between the lines.

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    1. High praise. Thank you so much, Iain! =)

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      1. Iain Kelly says:

        Well deserved!

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  3. Dora says:

    You spun this tale with a magic thread, Brenda. Love the twist ending.

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    1. That’s so nice, Dora, thanks much! =) I’m very glad you enjoyed.

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  4. Brenda, this was so ‘deep’ for so few words. Wonderful!

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    1. Thank you, Susan, for your kind comments! =)

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  5. I’m so very curious as to know more.
    There is an abundance of tales in each sentance you’ve written, Brenda.
    Bravo …!!!
    Be Safe 😷 … Isadora 😎

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    1. I’m glad to make you wonder about her. Your kind comments made me smile. Take care of yourself, Isadora! =)

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  6. JT Twissel says:

    Yikes – poor girl.

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    1. Unfortunately, there are many of girls in her situation. The story is loosely based on a true one. Thank you so much for commenting, Jan. =)

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  7. Dale says:

    I have to agree with the others, this was a well-written tight story. So much said in so few words. And go with him!! 🙂

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    1. Thanks so much, Dale, for your kind comments. I’m glad you enjoyed. =)

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  8. Michael says:

    Freedom to chose is so important,

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    1. It really is! Thanks for stopping by, Michael. =)

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  9. notestowomen says:

    Captivating story, Brenda. I liked the ending.

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    1. Thanks so much. I glad you enjoyed the story. =)

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      1. notestowomen says:

        You’re welcome and I did 🙂

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  10. msjadeli says:

    This person is wise beyond her years. I know she will do well, whatever circumstances she’s placed in. Good story, Brenda!

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    1. I’m cheering for her too. Thanks so much, Lisa! =)

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You’re very welcome.

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  11. Tannille says:

    Chilling. This situation happens too often in the world. I’m glad she found an out.

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    1. You’re right it does happen way to often. I’m glad you stopped by, T! =)

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  12. GHLearner says:

    What a scary future that woman has ahead of her. Good that she was able to make a choice.

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    1. I suppose she thought that either was was unknown and scary. At least, this was of her choosing. Thank you so much for reading and commenting! =)

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  13. ceayr says:

    Wonderful piece of writing, Brenda.
    A young woman’s life, dreams and love in so few words/

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    1. Thank you, C.E., your comment made my day! =)

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      1. ceayr says:

        Then my day has been worthwhile too, Brenda

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  14. A sad situation she’s been placed in, but I sense something positive in the last few words. Well done Brenda.

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    1. Well, that is what I have in mind for her, something positive. Thanks so much for commenting, Keith! =)

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  15. jenne49 says:

    A whole story, a whole raft of emotions in so few words. I feel I met this young woman. Such great writing.

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    1. Thank you so much for that encouragement. Smiles here! I’m very glad you met my character. =)

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  16. plaridel says:

    hope springs eternal.

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    1. It certainly does, Plaridel. We all must live life with hope. Thanks for stopping by! =)

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  17. granonine says:

    Her choice! Not an easy thing to pull off, I’m thinking, in her culture. Well done.

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    1. It is nearly impossible I fear. Thank you for your thoughtful comment. =)

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  18. Ann Coleman says:

    You manage to pack so much story into just a few words. Well done!

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    1. Thank so much Ann. This one wrote itself, which is unusual. I hope you have a nice weekend! =)

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  19. Such feelings in such few words! 💜

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    1. Thanks very much for your kind comment! =)

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  20. James McEwan says:

    Having a choice is the most important aspect of freedom. There is a a great escape story behind your words.

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    1. It certainly is. I have since written more but we’ll see where it goes. Thanks much for commenting and for your encouragement, James! =)

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  21. draliman says:

    It’s good to get some control back.

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    1. It is a good feeling, either way it goes. Thanks for commenting, Ali. Have a nice weekend! =)

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  22. Dear Brenda,

    Why do I get the feeling the he she’s getting ready to get in the boat with isn’t the he Mother chose for her. A lot of story between the lines. You never disappoint.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. No, he is not the one who was chosen for her. Thanks so much for your kind comments, they are very encouraging. Smiling! =)

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  23. ahtdoucette says:

    Such a powerful story in so few words. I hope this goes well for her. I fear it won’t. It makes me think of horrible stories I’ve heard about human trafficking of vulnerable women AND of wonderful stories of women who break free to live marvelous lives. Because, you never know right? So many feels in this one. Thanks for sharing.

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    1. Indeed, you never know. We can only hope those who are trapped are able to break free. Thank you for your thoughtful comments!

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  24. subroto says:

    At least she has the strength to make her own choices, she will survive. Lots of stories in between the lines, nice one,

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    1. She is a very determined girl! I’m very glad you enjoyed the story. =)

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  25. liz young says:

    I hope it works out for them both.

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    1. Me too! Thanks, Liz, for stopping by. =)

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  26. pennygadd51 says:

    You handled the reveal in masterly fashion; kudos! I wonder what happened to the girl’s mother when she failed to deliver…

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    1. Thank you so much for the kind comment on the writing! =)

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  27. A wonderfully under-stated story Brenda, I felt drawn in straight away. The surprise ending works very well. A pleasure to read.

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    1. I’m so glad you were drawn in from the beginning and enjoyed the story. Thank you for letting me know! =)

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  28. lolaWi says:

    unimaginable but i like the ending – she had a choice! 🙂

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    1. These situations are indeed unimaginable. Thank you for commenting! =)

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  29. Nobbinmaug says:

    Jesus! I stumbled and paused at “My mother had sold me to a stranger.” I hope the escape route is better than her non-choice. I can’t imagine it being worse. Good one.

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    1. Me too. Her non-choice is awful, but it is not an uncommon occurrence in a number of places in the world. Thank you for commenting!

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  30. Was it her choice really? Well written Brenda, with a suspenseful essence that leaves the reader wanting to know more.

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    1. True, she was forced to choose something she would not have otherwise. But still… Thanks so much for your encouraging comments about the writing! =)

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