Rage

The monster roared to the surface.  Its barbed tongue lashed out with venom and it dug deep, cutting and slicing.  Not even the look of pain on the face of its victim ceased its attack.

For most days, the monster bides its time, waiting to be seen, impatient to be heard.  When it struggles to claw its way to the surface, she takes a breath, leaves the room, counts to ten, and locks it away in the darkest corner of her being.  It works, most of the time.  On this day, all that was left was destruction in its path.

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Thanks to Rochelle for using my photo this week.  It was taken near my home after Typhoon Mangkhut battered Hong Kong in 2018.  

Thank you for taking the time to read my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story.  

If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit here.

61 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    I enjoyed the initial misdirection that this was a force of nature. Cpme to think of it, maybe it was

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    1. Indeed it is. And, a destructive one at that. I’m glad you enjoyed, Neil.

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  2. JT Twissel says:

    Hopefully it will keep working most of the time!

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    1. Don’t worry, it will. We all have our methods of keeping the monster at bay. Thank you for commenting! =)

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  3. Wow, this is thought-provoking. I hope you keep that power under wraps when I’m around!

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    1. I promise to! =) I’m glad you found it to be thought-provoking. Thanks for letting me know!

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  4. draliman says:

    You can only hold things in for so long…

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    1. That is true, Ali, maybe let it out in a healthier way or at a slower pace. Each of us must try to subdue the monster that lives inside (I’m feeling philosophical today – haha). Thanks so much for commenting.

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  5. Perhaps it should try counting to 20! A great take on your inspiring photo Brenda.

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    1. 30, 40, 50 even! =) Thanks so much for commenting, Keith, and I’m glad you like the photo.

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  6. GHLearner says:

    What a great take, Brenda. I think most of us know a monster of this or similar kind and the venomous tongue. The phrase with the sticks and stones and ‘words can never hurt me’ is so absolutely wrong.

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    1. Thanks so much, Gabi. And, I am in complete agreement with you … words hurt!

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  7. A clever take on a monstrous wind. Well done.

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    1. Thanks, Mason, for your kind comment! =)

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      1. You’re welcome.

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  8. plaridel says:

    we can always be grateful for the bounty that nature provides. but we must also look out for its destructive tendencies.

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    1. For sure, Plaridel! Thanks for commenting. =)

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  9. Dear Brenda,

    Oh that monster within. I understand. Cleverly written. Thanks for the great photo, too. 😀

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks so much, Rochelle! It’s fun to see my photo in the mix. =)

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  10. Dora says:

    Brenda,
    The perfect take on the photo as an allegory: we unleash the monster within us, our tongue, leaving destruction in its wake. I think that most of the regrets we have in life can be traced to this very monster.
    pax,
    dora

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    1. I certainly agree with that, Dora. Oh, that tongue is a mighty weapon. Thanks so much for your encouraging comment on the writing! =)

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  11. jenne49 says:

    What a powerful depiction of rage, Brenda. It’s left me speechless.
    Just brilliant.

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    1. Well, your encouraging comments on the writing made my day. Thank you so much, Jenne! =)

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  12. Danny James says:

    Very descriptive!

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    1. I’m glad you found the story descriptive. I wasn’t sure about this one. Thanks for letting me know!

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  13. Laurie Bell says:

    Ooooooo
    Her anger is indeed a force to be reckoned with. I fear one day she will not be able to contain it.

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    1. It is a mighty force and destroys all in its path. She will fight to contain it though. Thanks so much for commenting, Laurie.

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  14. Lorraine says:

    You must have overheard my rage-machine; sure sounds like me. I definitely need a time out.

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    1. Love your comment. We all have a rage monster that battles to reach the surface from time to time. A time out is a good way to put it. Thanks so much for commenting, Lorraine! =)

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  15. Tannille says:

    Cold fury can’t be bottled forever. Fantastic prose B!

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    1. Thanks so much, T! I think we all have that anger in our gut that needs to be managed so that it does not reach the level of rage.

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  16. James McEwan says:

    Yes, we all have tempers that must be controlled. Great idea for a story.

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    1. We certainly do and it certainly does. Thanks so much for the nice comment on the story idea. I saw the destruction and away my muse went.

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  17. that’s some seriously dangerous power and temper that needs controlling. I hope it can be done.

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    1. Yes, it can, with effort. Thanks so much for commenting, Michael. =)

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  18. pennygadd51 says:

    Your last line is a super climax to your metaphor. Absolutely chilling. Marriage-ending rage.

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    1. It is. When released, the words cut deep. I must admit the idea for the story comes from a neighbor we flies into a rage with his wife every few days. It sounds like more than words being released unfortunately. Our other neighbors and ourselves have called the police several times. On the day I wrote the story, I saw him returning. So sad! Thanks for commenting, Penny.

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      1. pennygadd51 says:

        What a desperately sad situation with your neighbour.

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  19. msjadeli says:

    Brenda you’ve described rage, its impact, and the need for it to stay under control very well in your story.

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    1. Thanks you so much, Lisa, for your kind comment on the writing of the story. It made me smile. I wasn’t sure at first if it worked. =)

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      1. msjadeli says:

        Oh it worked 🙂 You are welcome.

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  20. granonine says:

    That kind of rage has to have been kindled from a long history of abuse, or from a particularly terrible event. Good one.

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    1. We all have anger that needs to be controlled so that it doesn’t reach the level of rage. It’s true of course that upbringing and past trauma plays a significant part in how we handle it all. Thanks, Linda, for commenting. =)

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  21. I love this! Most people think I’m a kind, gentle, giving person and mostly I am. Then!!! Pis me off and I’m a monster. Well done.

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    1. I love your comment, Alicia. I right there with you. I’m so glad the story spoke to you. We all have that monster inside us that needs to be subdued. Sometimes we lose the battle from time to time. Thanks so much for commenting!

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  22. michael1148humphris says:

    That monster needs keeping in check. Many try, but not all manage to

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    1. Very true, Michael. Thanks so much for commenting! =)

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  23. subroto says:

    In this case it’s better in than out. Great use of the prompt and of course thanks for the photo for this week.

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    1. You are right, in this case best to control it. Thanks so much for your nice comments. =)

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  24. Sandra says:

    A lot to think about in this post. I enjoyed it, and the photo too. Many thanks.

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    1. I’m so glad it was thought provoking and that you enjoyed. Thanks so much for letting me know, Sandra. =)

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  25. Dale says:

    What a great take on your photo (for which I thank you for supplying!)
    That path can be so very destructive.

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    1. It certainly can. Thanks so much, Dale, for your kind comments!

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  26. Nobbinmaug says:

    Excellent metaphorical take. The rage monster is no bueno. Your story reminded me a lot of Marvin Gaye’s “Anger.”

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    1. Thanks so much for commenting and sending the Marvin Gaye’s song. The song says it. The anger makes you sick, wears you down, makes you old. (I’m sorry for the delay in commenting. I missed it.) Take care!

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  27. Teresa says:

    Oh, that is scary. Was anyone hurt?

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    1. We all struggle with anger from time to time, but when rage is released someone always gets hurt at least emotionally and often physically. The story came to mind because of a situation near me and, yes, someone was hurt (sadly). Thank you for the thoughtful comment, Teresa, and for reading and commenting. =)

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      1. Teresa says:

        It was nice to read… if only I could express my thoughts that way. Have a good day Brenda.

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  28. Excellent post that most can relate to if we’re honest. Rage, anger, hot buttons – whatever we call it, most of us have to learn to deal with it. Thanks for the reminder.

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    1. You are right, we all have the propensity to release that anger and injure those around us. I appreciate your comments!! Thank you, Judy.

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