Captured Story

Leaving my school one day, a mysterious woman stood before me with a large book in her hand, blank pages inside.

“Come,” she said.

I felt a dizzying pull. Captured, I grew and lived. On my journey, I heard the woman’s voice. I sensed the woman’s eyes following me. The way appeared as I moved along. I followed it until the end. I closed my eyes one final time, then opened them up again.

Once more a child, I stood before the woman.  Wearing a crooked smile, she closed the book.  The pages were full, my story told.

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Thank you for stopping by and reading my story! It is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields. With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we’re to write a 100-word story.  The inspiring photo this week was provided by Ted Strutz.

If you would like to join in and write your own story, or if you would like read the stories of others from this week, visit here.

Stay safe, stay well!

44 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    I want to find that woman. That would make writing so much easier

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    1. Indeed! That’s what I was going for, Neil. Some days…I got nothing. 🙂

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    Just lovely this.

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    1. I’m so glad you like it. For some reason, your comment went to my spam folder. Anyway, thanks, Iain! =)

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  3. Dale says:

    That was magical!

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    1. I’m very glad you found it magical, Dale! 🙂

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  4. Bill says:

    A charmingly haunting story, Brenda. Well done.

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story. I like what you wrote, “charmingly haunting.” Thanks, Bill. 🙂

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  5. draliman says:

    Maybe that’s what will happen when we die. Someone will capture our story in a book to be shelved in a huge library 🙂

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    1. Hmm, that’s an interesting idea. I like it! Thanks, Ali, for stopping by. 🙂

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  6. An enchanting tale indeed!

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    1. Thanks so much, Keith! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂

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  7. What a lovely, lyrical view of one life. We are all a story.

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    1. We are indeed. Thanks so much for the lovely comments, Eugenia. 🙂

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  8. The enchantment is captivating, Brenda.
    Have a wonderful weekend …
    Isadora 😎

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    1. Thanks so much, Isadora. And, you as well. I hope it is a safe and peaceful one! 🙂

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  9. Oh, this is so transportive! Lovely! 🙂

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    1. Your comment made me smile. Thanks so much, Na’ama! 🙂

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      1. 🙂 It was lovely! 🙂

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  10. pennygadd51 says:

    I find the crooked smile on the woman’s face to be extremely sinister. She’s taken something from the main character and the main character doesn’t even realise it’s gone. A very original story, Brenda.

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    1. I’m very glad you picked up on the sinister side of the story. 🙂 Thanks so much for your encouraging comments!

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  11. plaridel says:

    the woman helped her write her story. to return the favor, she should take her to an orthodontist and get her crooked smile fixed. 🙂

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    1. Haha. That’s funny, Plaridel. Thanks so much for making me smile. 🙂

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  12. Margaret says:

    Oooh. I feel a sense of completion, and fulfilment at the end, but also I think there’s an uncomfortable undercurrent here. The crooked smile, the MC’s loss of control. This is very thought-provoking.

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    1. Thank you, Margaret, for your thoughtful comments. I’m very glad you enjoyed the story. 🙂

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  13. Danny James says:

    Loved your story!

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    1. I’m so happy you enjoyed the story. Thanks, Danny, for letting me know. 🙂

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  14. Dear Brenda,

    I wonder if I could get the old woman to visit me? 😉 Enchanting and magical story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Haha…I’ll send her your way. Thank you, Rochelle! 🙂

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  15. Ann Coleman says:

    I loved this, Brenda! All our lives, contained in a book.

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    1. I’m so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for letting me know, Ann! 🙂

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  16. GHLearner says:

    What a unique and imaginative story. So thought-provoking. We have very little control over our lives, and the kid is made aware of it. I felt the sinister aspect of the command and not-knowing, too. But that’s how we live, isn’t it?

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    1. Very true! Thank you so much for your wonderful comments. 🙂

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  17. Such a poetic story. Lovely, Brenda.

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    1. Thanks so much, Jilly! What a nice comment. 🙂

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  18. msjadeli says:

    Brenda your story was spellbinding and made my scalp tingle. I wonder what her school was?

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    1. I love your comment, Lisa. It made me smile. The MC is a child and the school was her elementary. Thanks for stopping by! 🙂

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      1. msjadeli says:

        Great! You’re welcome.

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  19. Nobbinmaug says:

    I love the idea of a story from the point of view of a character as she’s being created. It’s all so meta. That’s my interpretation, anyway.

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    1. Thanks so much for the kind comments! Yes, the story was created as she lived and through her eyes. 🙂

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  20. ahtdoucette says:

    A fun, fantastical story. I like it.

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    1. Thanks so much! I’m happy you liked it. 🙂

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  21. Laurie Bell says:

    Ooooooooooo
    So mysterious ! I love it.

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    1. I really love your reactions, Laurie! Thanks so much for that. 🙂

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