The Promise

“Tell me again,” the young girl sang.

Emile smiled at her daughter’s enthusiasm.  “Once upon a time, there lived a princess.  Her father was the powerful druid-king.  An enchanted palace was her playground.  One day, the evil shadow-king slipped through the magical barrier that surrounded their kingdom.  ‘I will have everything,’ the shadow-king declared.  A battle ensued.  The palace crumbled.  The druid-king commanded the princess, ‘Hide in the forest!  I will find you–’”

Emile stopped, motioning for her daughter to hide.  The shadow of a man appeared in the doorway to their cottage in the forest.

“Father?” Emile whispered. 

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Often, castles make me think of magic!  This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly 100-word challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  The engaging photo to inspire our creativity this week was provided by Sandra Cook.

If you would like to join in and write your own story, or if you would like read the stories of others from this week, visit here.

34 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Lots of resonances of stories we know here. But the ending takes us somewhere different

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    1. I like going someplace different. 🙂 Thanks for commenting, Neil.

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  2. James McEwan says:

    The shadows seem a repetitive menace. I hope it really is her father at the door.

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    1. I’m glad to make you wonder, James! We will see… Thanks so much for commenting.

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  3. Dale says:

    Oooh… Now we are left to wonder! Well done, Brenda.

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    1. I like that!! Thanks for the lovely comment, Dale. 🙂

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      1. Dale says:

        My pleasure 🙂

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  4. GHLearner says:

    Oh, great cliff-hanger, Brenda. And it could almost be a prequel to my story this week.

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    1. I’m so happy you enjoyed. It is uncanny how close our two stories align. Thanks much for the nice comment, Gabi!

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  5. Bill says:

    Wander often, wonder always. Very well done. 🙂

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    1. Oh, I like that and will have to remember it! Thanks so much, Bill. 🙂

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      1. Bill says:

        Of course, Brenda. 🙂

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  6. Dear Brenda,

    Delicious blend of fantasy and reality. It doesn’t sound like his father’s appearance was expected. You left me wanting to turn the page to learn more. Good job!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Well, I’m so glad to leave you wanting to know more. That’s always good. 🙂 Thanks so much, Rochelle!

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  7. Tannille says:

    Oh damn, that was over too quick. I want to know more. What a great setup for a large story (if you were that way inclined).

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    1. Well, your comment made me smile. I’m so glad you found the story engaging, T!! 🙂

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  8. draliman says:

    Fantasy suddenly became reality at the end, I fear.

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    1. Yes, the line between was certainly blurred and she was found! Thanks for commenting, Ali!

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  9. msjadeli says:

    Brenda, there is a lot to like about your story. The enchantment, the portals into other realms, where fiction meets reality, the little girl examining the figure standing the doorway.

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    1. I’m so very glad you enjoyed the story, Lisa!! Thank you for letting me know. 🙂

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You’re welcome 🙂

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  10. Would like to know what happens next.

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    1. I’m sorry I somehow missed your comment. I’m so glad to leave you wanting more. 🙂 Thanks for commenting!

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  11. Sandra says:

    Very swift change of mood there, to an ominous ending.

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    1. Thanks for reading and commenting, Sandra! 🙂

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  12. Oh, I love this so much! 🙂

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    1. Well, that made me smile! Thanks so much for the wonderful comment, Na’ama. 🙂

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  13. Patricia Clair says:

    Ooh, loved this! It felt to me like the Shadow-King was making a live, in person appearance. 😉

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    1. Thanks so much, Patricia, for the lovely comment! It could be… 🙂

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  14. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh I sure hope it’s her father and not someone more sinister.
    Well done. A great sense of magic and mystery here!

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    1. I’m so happy you enjoyed and thanks much for the encouraging comments, Laurie!

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  15. Vartika says:

    Sweet story.. I have started imagining castles and all. Well done

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    1. I do love castles and all the stories they inspire. Thanks for commenting, Vartika! 🙂

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