Crammed inside the ship, the stench was overwhelming. Animals once occupied its hull, but now people were its cargo. Riding the waves, my stomach emptied frequently.
Will I ever arrive?
Saying goodbye to family was heart-wrenching.
Will I see them again?
The crew periodically took a few of us at a time onto the top deck. My brother told me to jump overboard as soon as I saw land. This morning, land appeared.
What will this new life be like?
Mother had told me, “It will be safer.”
I hope that will be true.
I jumped, swimming toward the unknown.
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“Friday Fictioneers” is a weekly challenge by Rochelle Wisoff Fields. The challenge is to write a story, using only 100 words, in response to a photo prompt. It has been a lot of fun to join in with this fantastic and encouraging group of writers! This week’s photo was provided by JS Brand. Other stories can be found here.
Nice poem
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Thanks so much! =)
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Welcome Brenda
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Makes one wonder about immigrants … Especially those in early 1900s.
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My husband’s family entered the US in 1907 from Sicily through Ellis Island. So, their story was not the same. I know for many, especially those fleeing dangerous situations, the journey can be dangerous. There are a plethora of stories out there!
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Also my paternal grandparents. One of my favorite past posts … love the music and the video. https://afrankangle.wordpress.com/2013/01/07/on-a-dream/
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A poignant story. Nicely done.
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Thank you so much! =)
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A moving and beautifully written story, Brenda. I felt the narrator’s sadness, helplessness, apprehension, hope and determination. So very well done.
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Thank you so much, Moon, for your encouragement! I’m so happy you enjoyed it.
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That’s a huge theme to tackle in 100 words, and you manage very successfully. You’ve very cleverly identified detail that makes us see the voyage of one illegal immigrant, and realise how desperate she must have been to make such a horrible and dangerous journey. The smell, the sea-sickness, the long swim to shore, such powerful details! Excellent writing!
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Thank you, Penny. =) I’m happy you enjoyed the story and appreciate so much your comments and encouragement!
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Good job! Safer is some times worth almost any struggle.
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For sure. I often wonder what I would do …
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I really hope it does become safer for them, although in reality it may also become worse. The plight of desperate refugees the world over.
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The situation for asylum seekers worldwide is a complicated issue. There are a plethora of difficult, sad stories. Thank you so much for reading my story and commenting.
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I can hear her voice in this so very well. Great capture!
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I’m so glad you could hear her voice!! Thank you for commenting. =)
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A boatload of refugees was found just off my local beach a few days ago. At least the locals here are friendly. A well-told tale of our times.
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Thank you Keith for your encouragement! I’m so glad they found friendly people on the shore. =)
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It’s hard to highlight the conditions and the desperation in 100 words but you’ve done a great job 🙂
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Thank you so much for that encouragement. =)
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Dear Brenda,
“Do you suppose there is such a place, Toto?” Then I wonder what Emma Lazarus would say if she were still alive? Conflicting thoughts here, but not to detract from your wonderfully told story.
Shalom
Rochelle
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She might think she were on an alien planet, the world feels upside down and crazy nowadays. My husband works with asylum seekers here. It’s all so complicated and tragic for many. Thank you for your kind words on my story!
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Such a poignant story – and very apt in today’s climate of people striving to reach new shores in order to better their lives. I hope your character succeeds. Well done.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you so much, Susan. I picture her making it to shore and finding friendly, helpful people as Keith commented (Keith’s Ramblings) 🙂
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Wonderfully done, Brenda. You conveyed so much in 100 words. I dearly hope they make it safely and continue to live in safety…
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Thank you, Dale! In my mind, she made it to shore and found a safe haven. =)
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I’m good with that! 😉
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First though was “slave ship.” Then “refugees? Immigrants?” Either way, you worked a lot of drama into just a few words. Well done.
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Thank you for your encouragement on the story. =)
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I love how you focus so much of a story in that single moment escaping for land… I can see the advantages of getting there as quickly as possible.
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Thank you for commenting. Her brother knew the risks that possibly awaited her, he heard the rumors. The dangers she faced in her home country forced her family to send her off into the unknown, on a possibly dangerous journey. It’s hard to imagine. =)
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Nicely done! I even feel a little claustrophobic reading this, which isn’t something I usually suffer from. I hope this had a happy ending for our swimmer.
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I imagine it did. Thanks so much! =)
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Wonderfully done, Brenda. That’s a huge topic that you’ve covered in 100 words. I hope the reality would be so safe these days.
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Thank you so much, Norma, for stopping by, reading my story and your encouragement. =)
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You’ve described this refugee’s dangerous, harrowing journey so vividly. The ending is so hopeful.
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We should live in hope! Thank you for your encouraging comment on the story. =)
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Indeed! You are most welcome.
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Reminded me of Alex Haley’s Roots, very nicely done Brenda.
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Thank you so much! =)
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Powerful flash. Loved it.
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Thank you so much! =)
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