The flower market at Lunar New Year was exquisite. Rosita held her daughter’s small hand as they glided through, admiring the brilliant exotic plants.
They chattered excitedly, making their way back to the hotel where her husband waited. They had planned a special dinner for the last night of their vacation.
A scream popped their joyful bubble. Rosita ran toward the young woman who had been knocked to the sidewalk by a man on a motorcycle, after he had ripped her bag from her shoulder.
Dropping her daughter’s hand that day would haunt Rosita for the rest of her life.
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“Friday Fictioneers” is a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields, to write a story using only 100 words in response to a photo prompt. This week’s photo was provided by JS Brand. I have enjoyed starting off my weekend by writing a story. If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit HERE.
Sometimes I feel the need to explain how I came up with a specific story based on the photo prompt for that week. When I first saw the photo, I thought of trapped, maybe twisted, and began to write.
I was influence by an email I received yesterday, a travel warning by the US State Department for one of the Asian countries we travel to, “Recent reports of criminal activities include … targeting children in public places for potential kidnapping…”
That email plus the fact my husband witnessed a woman being robbed in this specific country, near the flower market at Lunar New Year. The motorcycle driver pulled alongside the sidewalk some distance ahead of my husband, took the young woman’s purse and pushed her to the ground. It happened quickly, but my husband took off running on instinct. Of course, he couldn’t catch the motorcycle and the woman was okay, just shaken.
And so, the story was born.
Nooo!! It would haunt me too.
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Yes, a parent’s worse nightmare.
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Oh my goodness, Brenda, you took your readers from happy family time to every parent’s worst nightmare in a couple of short, tightly written steps. A grim but great story.
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Thank you for the encouragement on the writing, I really appreciate it. Certainly a nightmare you could never wake from.
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Even before I read your note I was trying hard not to think of what had become of poor little Abby. How your world can change in an instant.
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It is a difficult reality to imagine. It’s dreadful how quickly these things can happen in our world. A reminder to stay alert.
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Oh no! I wasn’t expecting that outcome. Interesting take on the photo prompt, Brenda.
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I know it’s a bit of an unusual take for the photo, that’s why I included an explanation. =) It is always interesting how everyone has a different take. Thanks for commenting!
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She was kidnapped? Awful
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Yes, I’m sorry to say.
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The worst nightmare any parent could experience. Terrifying.
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Certainly true, in our world parents must stay vigilent.
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Oh no! If “kidnapped” means ransom and return, bad enough, but I know it can be far worse..
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Unfortunately, there are certainly worse scenerios it’s true.
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Chilling tale, Brenda! You really know how to write a book in a nutshell!
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Thanks so much, Marie!
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My pleasure Brenda!
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Dear Brenda,
I appreciated the explanation but truly one was needed. Stunning, haunting and well written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks much for the encouraging comment on my writing. I sometimes wonder, do readers think to themselves, “How in the world did she come up with that from the prompt?” I am, after-all, an over-thinker (ha ha).
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what a twist. an act of kindness turned into a nightmare.
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A nightmare for sure. Thank you for commenting. =)
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I agree with Rochelle. You didn’t need to explain, though it was appreciated.
What a chilling tale and yes, every parent’s nightmare.
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Thank you, Dale, for commenting and for echoing Rochelle. As you can see from my response to her, I tend to over think. =)
When my children were little, it was my number one paranoia living in very crowded parts of the world. But, it is certainly a worry for any parent. Without sounding cynical (ok I’m a bit cynical), they world’s not a safe place.
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Oh, I didn’t see your response 😉
I “lost” one of my boys twice. Scared the bejeezus out of me… When he was found, after the hug, I wanted to beat him…
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That’s okay of course! =)
Oh my goodness, how horrifying. I can relate to the joyful hugs and the shouting that follows finding them. My son thought it’d be fun to hide in a rack of clothing at a store. Crying – hugging – shouting – kissing. =)
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Yes. Went to the bathroom all by himself… at the ZOO!!! Just about lost my mind and contemplated throwing him to the lions right beside the bathroom…
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I would have lost my mind too!! Still laughing about the lions … =)
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In Rosita’s defence, she was trying the help the young woman. Should she have left the scene with her daughter? No easy answers.
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No easy answers for sure, Abhijit. A momentary lapse of judgement. The entire incident might have been a ruse. Thank you for commenting.
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Your story started out so well, then….. A totally different take and a welcome change of direction.
Click to read my FriFic tale!
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Thank you so much, Keith. Life is full of sudden changes of direction.
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Nightmarish quality to this. It can happen just that quickly.
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It can and unfortunately it does. Have to be on guard always. Thank you for your comments, Sandra!
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A living nightmare. There but for the grace and all that …
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It certainly would be, every parent’s …
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This is so dark… was the attack on the woman just a distraction? even if not losing a child must be the worst thing that could happen.
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Yes, it was a diversion which is quite common in this part of the world. Always need to stay alert. Thanking for reading and for commenting!
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It’s all so sad. I know there are crime rings that do that kind of thing on a regular basis.
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Very true, Larry. We lived a number of years in another part of southeast Asis and ran a children’s home for girls at risk, getting them out of harm’s way. We ran up against all sorts of really ‘bad’ people. Thank you for commenting!
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A sad and ugly reality of our world. Well done.
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Mind-numbingly sad. Thank you for commenting!
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Goodness! I can’t imagine.
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Thank you for commenting, Alicia. I always encourage friends who travel to be alert, especially in certain countries. So sad.
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Very tightly written, Brenda. I like the way you started the scene so happy and peaceful before turning it into a nightmare. Well done.
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I sincerely appreciate your encouragement on the writing. Thanks so much, Russell.
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Wow, that was hard hitting
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
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My pleasure and thanks for the follow
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Omg… this is my worst nightmare. So well told.
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Oh my god! Great write!
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Thank you so much!
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