Storms

His pesky sister, Talia, yells from their hut.

“What ‘ya doin’ up there in that tree, Fetu?”

Ignoring her, he shimmies up to a higher branch.

Will Sefina wait for me or will she marry Lagi? 

With a storm on the horizon, Fetu’s father forbade him taking the outrigger and crossing the strait to her island.

But, I know if Sefina hears my voice her heart will be mine. 

Tungee sold him a phone for a saltwater croc. The SIM card cost Fetu dearly … one heart of palm.  He waves the device high in the air.

Dang it, no reception!

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This story is my contribution to “Friday Fictioneers,” a weekly challenge hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields.  With the help of a photo prompt to inspire, we are to write a 100-word story.  This week’s photo was contributed by Susan Eames. If you would like to join in with this encouraging group of writers or read their stories from this week, visit HERE.

 

44 Comments Add yours

  1. Oh, poor Fetu. Liked this take on the photo prompt, Brenda.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Lovely photo from Fiji, Susan. When traveling to remote locations, which I often do, I’m still amazed at finding cell phones there. Shows my age! 🙂

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    He should have bought some reception too

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    1. He could have bought some for nipa palm but was running out of time and decided to risk it. 🙂

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Oh man, typical of technology to foil the best laid plans!

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    1. For sure! Too bad he couldn’t just jump in his boat. 🙂

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  4. plaridel says:

    darn, i think he should keep trying until the battery is dead. that’s the best he can do under the circumstances.

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    1. Very true, he needs to persevere! 🙂

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  5. Abhijit Ray says:

    For love Fetu is going to do anything. Catching a salt water crocodile and selling is hardly a challenge for him. Nice story.

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    1. Thanks, Abhijit! Maybe he needs to swim the strait. 🙂

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  6. Tannille says:

    Is good reception too much to ask for?
    I feel his frustration.

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    1. Seriously, he’s not asking for much. And, there’s so much at stake.

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  7. Sandra says:

    I love the alternative currency. 🙂

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    1. Thanks, Sandra. I’ve been watching Ed Stafford (a survivalist) from the UK. =)

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  8. Dear Brenda,

    Poor Fetu. Love thwarted by no signal. Love your take on the prompt. I maintain that no one can beat Israelis…particularly the Orthodox for their cells. I saw one woman backing away from the Western Wall, yacking away on her phone. SMH

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Really sad, her phone call was really THAT important. Thank you for reading and commenting! =)

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  9. Dale says:

    What a great take on the photo, Brenda!
    Poor Fetu!

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    1. Thanks so much, Dale! =)

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  10. draliman says:

    Oh no! He needs to get higher up in the tree 🙂

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    1. Good idea! Or, maybe he’s going to have to swim the strait. Hmmm…depends on how much he really love her. =)

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  11. pennygadd51 says:

    My heart bleeds for poor Fetu. He’ll always wonder what might have been. Perhaps he should pinch the outrigger and go, risking his father’s wrath and the peril of the storm.

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    1. I agree. Depends on how desperate he is though. =)

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  12. The struggle is real and a sucker is born every day.

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    1. That’s true. I guess Fetu was scammed. Thanks for commenting, Tracey! =)

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  13. gahlearner says:

    Oh no, maybe if he goes up a bit higher? Perfect story for the prompt.

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    1. I’m hoping as he climbs he’ll be able to reach Sefina. =) Thank you so much!

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  14. granonine says:

    Fetu’s unrequited love, and all because of poor cell reception 🙂

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    1. It’s sad to think … Thanks so much for commenting, Linda! =)

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  15. DB McNicol says:

    Awwww, star-crossed lovers thwarted by technology. Well done!

    DB McNicol
    author, traveler, shutterbug
    Author Blog
    Personal Blog

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    1. I wonder how often that happens! =) Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

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  16. Poor Fetu. All that money for nothing. Some people took advantage of his situation. I hope things improve for him as he seems like a nice person. A good story and well written, Brenda. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    1. Thank you so much, Suzanne. =)

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  17. One small detail he didn’t check up on – Tungee must he happy!

    My go at Friday Fictioneers!

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    1. A huge detail overlooked indeed! =)

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  18. I liked the story, Brenda. A phone does no good without reception and sometimes a little altitude helps.

    You might consider changing Talia’s voice. Her dialogue reminds me of someone from the deep South rather than an island girl.

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    1. Thanks much for the suggestion. You’re so right. I missed that and will change it. =)

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  19. What a touching story Brenda, I like the gentle way you tell it.

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    1. Thank you so much. That’s a very nice comment. =)

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  20. Margaret says:

    Poor Fetu. I hope he’s wrong about Sefina’s love. Surely she knows he’s worth waiting for. Lovely story.

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    1. Here’s hoping love with triumphant! =)

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  21. There’s almost a mythological feel to this one, Brenda; minus the cell phone! 😉 Fun story!

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    1. That’s nice! Thank you so much, Dawn! 🙂

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  22. Charming story.

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    1. Thanks so much, Dawn! 🙂

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